lovers rain

My darling: I offer my version of stanzas for your poem that came to life last night. Thank you for both. As long as I live, I will never stop saying I love you. ~A when the earth turns its face to fire less dark beside me you lay i feed the morning into your mouth you swallow and grow light when i reach you wander from my bed into the heat of every lover shy in clouds you feed me with trees and flow into me with tongues of mountains you return to me in pools of water then i know the night before you are fed i reached again into your raining eyes and you poured into me a parting cloud such a deeper truth i entered at your return transforming me into your lover again and i touched you again as your moon dress fell upon the water my eyes gave you filling my mouth with yours you rain into me all things growing alive and together

How does wow grab ya ??? lol brilliant both of you love and big hugs Jayne x x x

Changed my mind, Barry. (just like a woman? lol) when I reach needs to be on a line all by itself the way you have the rest of it stanza'd. ~A

It almost sounds as if you are talking about dreams, and have been spending restless nights. ~ Gee

Stanza two is strong. Whole poem flows well, or rather rain-like. Written with affection, nicely executed.

The picture it paints is beyond visual. pure joy and love...excellent What of distance are you together in the night yet??? Come on we need more than tidbits will you both lead your work to a deafening big cymbal crash? Wonderful Seabhac

Ann of Norway " i feed the morning into your mouth you swallow and grow light" "shy in clouds you feed me with trees and flow into me with tongues of mountains" "into your raining eyes and you poured into me a parting cloud" "filling my mouth with yours you rain into me all things growing alive and together" I see this pouring with the eyes of magic clouded and feel the glowing shine reflected off the waters of your love, so beautifully, so beautifully done, both of you. My wish is that it never stops pouring and can turn into the river of life's journey for you. Love Ann.