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magics02
Feb 09, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Take What You Can

Don't need starsDon't want fameDon't wish to play some silly old game Don't practice hate
No time to wasteDon't show meanTo only be seen Don't try to fixA broken stickKeep on  truckingDon't be stuck in

Misery loves companyMisery loves hateMiseries not all about give and take
Love one another, before it's too late
 Take what you canDiscard all the restMake sure you stickTo your very fine best
— magics02, Feb 09, 2010

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Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Miss Mona

Really liked this one but I had a problem with this line Misery is not all (about) give and take felt like that line needed the 'about' but shes your baby and thats my opinion you can use or trash at your whim love and hugs Jayne x x x
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magics02

16 years 4 months ago

Tweaked in

Let me know how it sounds now dear Jayne and thank for the visit xoxomagics02
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

Mona! please attend to

Mona! please attend to following your own advice! Check your spelling! lol! Like the message. It's always later than we think to give love...in all its delicacies and poisoned breath. ~A
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magics02

16 years 4 months ago

Yes MUM???

LOl thanks for stoppin by and this write I do attend. Have a great day Magics02
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magics02

16 years 4 months ago

Kaily

And your message is? Glad you seemed fit to stop on by and was this a comment or a tidbit suppose, anyhow thanks and you know I know you mum here but sorry I only have one Mom and I love her to death. No offense to you young one. LOL How is the spelling now and I did tweak it a bit here. You know I wrote it when I was half asleep and coffee not ready LMAO xoxoxo magics02
the_fool

the_fool

16 years 3 months ago

very vague

turns into tiny advice bits after the second stanza. needs some cleaning there at the end 'to your very fine best', justs sounds like something a kid would say. 'before it's too late'- very cliche line. don't stop writing.
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magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Suggestions?

thank you for the visit and how would you offer some change to the poem. I welcome your comments about that. I will try rewording the last line again. and yes I did that a couple of times. It really is not advice bits, its what I woke up with one morning. I guess it refers to writing, take what you can, discard the rest and stick to your very fine best. thanks for stopping by magics02