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Katrina (hurricane)

Katrina, Katrina, you kicked me when I was downcrushed in my house and I almost downsitting on a neighbor's roof toppraying the water would soon stopI called to a woman hanging on to a treebut when I got there she was no where to beagain I almost drown, my neighbor pulled me back on his roofswimming back, I was broad sided by the truththough I had lost everything, I didn't want to diemy neighbor held me and we both had a good cryhe told me he didn't know what happened to his kids or his wifeand that he had just seen a woman loose her lifethe rest of the day we set in silence, holding back the tearswe never knew each other though we have been neighbors for yearsthe sun turned our roof into a frying panlooking into my neighbors eyes, I knew I was looking at a dying manthe long hot day turned to nightnot a sign of help in sighthad to stay awake, no way to sleephad to watch your moves, roof way too steepsurrounded by water and dying of thirstthinking it couldn't get much worstKatrina, Katrina, you kicked me when I was downI went under once, twice, but my spirit will never drownI was already living hand to mouth, paycheck to paycheckI only thought my life was a wreckoh what! I would give to have my old life backbarely scraping by in my three room shackthe sun is coming up, there's a ray of hopeI have to reach deep for the strength to copeto keep from sliding off, my neighbor is straddled a ventand he sure looks like he is spentbefore I can check on him, someone shouts from a boatrescued from what was once, one man's castle, now surrounded by nature's moatI make my way to my neighbor, but the calvary was too lateexposure, lack of water and no insulin sealed his fatethe two fishermen said they drove all night to launch their boat at dawnhad to keep turning around because so many bridges were goneKatrina, Katrina, you kicked me when I was downlook what you have done to my townthe convention center is a sea of refugeesthe scene nearly brings me to my kneesa sea of despair and miseryas far as my eyes can seethey tell me busses are on there wayI was on a roof for a day and night and now here for my third dayhere I'm now on my third night and it's living hellno water, no food and that smelland you don't dare go to sleep, murders and rapein the morning, if I have the strength, I think I'll escapemy neighbor's roof wasn't this badthe only thing this place does for me is make me madthere's rumor that looters will be shot on sightif your lucky, a looter will give you a bitethe governor gave the cops the right to commandeer what they needbut you can be shot for taking food when you have hungry and sick kids to feedKatrina, Katrina, you kicked us when we were downwe went under once, twice, but you can't drown the spirit of this town dedicated to the spirit of New Orleans and all of her neighbors and victims of Katrina. This story is a compilation of many stories I read and heard. In itself it is not a true story. I live in North La. ....I know with my health conditions. I could not have survived the conditions people have and are still having to endure. .......feel free to use this poem anyway you see fit if you think it can help in any way. ..... Not for profit and please keep intact (complete) copyright  9-2-05   huey r horton    hippiepoet69  
— hippiepoet69, Feb 08, 2010

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magics02

16 years 4 months ago

Great rhyming and great story here HippieP

Hippie Poet what a story you tell of the Katrina Hurricane. And I would continue this write of yours, so poignantly displayed on your page. Very good in spite of some misspelled words and all you nailed this one for sure. Such a feel for what did happen there and all the loved ones lost. The story of the man on the roof was so touching. Storyteller Hippiepoet please keep on writing. Magics02 xoxoxo
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hippiepoet69

16 years 4 months ago

Thanks Very much

I know my spelling stinks and I lost my ediditer years ago.The spell check does not always catch it when I use the wrong word. I would rather be a good writter than a good speller. And I know I'm smarter than my computer. I can miss spell more words than it knows. A lot of people that fled Katrina came up here to Shreveport. I have talked to a few of them. I wish I could of done more than just write a poem. Thanks Again. huey
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 1 month ago

Hey Huey....

...I've got an idea for an excercise for you. Try causing every other line to rhyme. At least try rhyming the first and the third lines. It will expand as a poet that rhymes, believe me. Then, cause the second and the fourth to rhyme along with the first and the third. Then, start making up your own rhyme schemes.....and that, will complete you. Just give it a try. See what it brings. It couldn't hurt. Oh.....I almost forgot. Your effort was very gallant, and quite eloquent if you ask me. Good job ! "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
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magics02

16 years 4 months ago

You have did more

In your heart this write goes out to many that survived the storm and for those who are still trying to survive through it even though it was years ago it is still fresh in the minds of many. Thank you for bringing this into the light ad not place on a shelf somewhere, forgotten. Good job HPoet. Very good. Yes I know of the spell check you talk about. When you do your final manuscript do it then. Love and Hugs to you Magics02
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hippiepoet69

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks docmaverrick

I used to write a few like that. I like that syle. So I will have to give it a try. I'm trying to get back into poetry. I'm not as good now as I used to be. My mind is not as sharp as it used to be. And I'm not as inspired. But I need to keep my mind active. I truely thank you. Take Care. huey