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Feb 08, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

What Women Want As editted by Ma'am

 

 

 

 

 

What women want?

 

 

You give of a lot of what women want
but you know
no woman is ever satisfied as she wants

All the time she wants,

More of this and that,

She wants to lie flat,

She wants love,

Lust,

Also sex,

She wants respect.

 

What does a woman want?

May I ask of you?

How do you come to know!!!

What a woman wants from you?

 

Give them more,

The more they want,

Man has a limitation too …

They can woo

They can sue

They can also

Forever crave
only you

 

— loved, Feb 08, 2010

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loved

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16 years 4 months ago

thanks

i read some ones article on this subject so i too wrote my version though dissimilar thats all to it thanks for ur feed back sir any suggestions shall rework on it
loved

loved

16 years 4 months ago

women poem revised

You give of a lot of what women want but you know no woman is ever satisfied as she wants All the time she wants, More of this and that, She wants to lie flat, She wants love, Lust, Also sex, She wants respect. What does a woman want May I ask of you? How do you come to know!!! What a woman wants from you? Give them more, The more they want, Man has a limitation too … They can woo They can sue They can also Forever crave only you
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 4 months ago

it could be a really good piece this so do work on it

What women want   You give off a lot of what women want,..........of not off( think of off as something jumping off) of wine!
.....................................................................................you don't need the OFF anyway cut it out. but you know no woman is ever satisfied
 as she wants..................no full stop here All the time she wants.......comma after time, More of this and that...........comma here She wants to lay flat..........comma here She wants love, Lust............comma Also sex...........comma She wants respects........................no S, just respect.   What a woman wants............what does a woman want May I ask of you? How do you come to know?............different from one to the next!!! NO ? next line yes? what a woman wants from you (?)   Give them more.....comma The more they want.......comma Man has a sort of limitation too......don't really need SORT OF here They can woo They can sue They can also Forever want only you.............use crave instead of want here. There's perhaps a bit much want on the other hand it binds it all together too, some of it is a bit glib, I see what Lonnie means and it could be a really good piece this so do work on it some more and only on it not writing ten others in between then you might produce some good poems. Isn't it good to feel wanted? Yours friend Ann of Norway.
loved

loved

16 years 4 months ago

poem revised

Ma'am r u from Ireland ?My lap top which is Canadian English based automatically switched on th IRISH base. u know there r so many kinds of English these days Queens English is no more astandard, as it once was . we have USA Canadian Indian Japanese Chinese French and African English[ES] So i get confused and let the compy do its own grammtising, hence the errors however I have punctuated as suggested by u Hope it fits in comfortably thanks too. LOVED What Women Want You give of a lot of what women want but you know no woman is ever satisfied as she wants All the time she wants, More of this and that, She wants to lie flat, She wants love, Lust, Also sex, She wants respect. What does a woman want May I ask of you? How do you come to know!!! What a woman wants from you? Give them more, The more they want, Man has a limitation too … They can woo They can sue They can also Forever crave only you PLEASE SEE As the lady has commented,, women want more money for shopping pl do fit it in as per her request thanks LOVED
loved

loved

16 years 4 months ago

thanks a revised version

You give of a lot of what women want but you know no woman is ever satisfied as she wants All the time she wants, More of this and that, She wants to lie flat, She wants love, Lust, Also sex, She wants respect. What does a woman want May I ask of you? How do you come to know!!! What a woman wants from you? Give them more, The more they want, Man has a limitation too … They can woo They can sue They can also Forever crave only you
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 4 months ago

Do you mean here that men don't want,!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Almost wish I were Irish! Half Scottish half English. Do you mean here that men don't want, they want as much, if not more, than women do! You could expand this poem I feel and make it into a two part one, the other half, it could be entitled The other half too he he. But seriously I think it could have some more to it, we get the message, women want, loud and clear but would like a little more to enjoy. A poem is a mini play or film, and we like to have many of our senses involved, not only the deductive ones, so what about it Istan? Get weaving. Luv Ann, born Somerset, lived Derby, Leicester, Bristol, Exeter, London, Oslo, Flatdal.