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Seren
Seren
Feb 07, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

small price to pay for truth

calls to truth were ignored
he flew into smaller steps,
and plowed crop circles

traveling the same path
of denial, it was only truth
that he feared

and the only thing
that unbound the mask,
behind which he hid


~~~~~

To find between one breath
and the next
the courage to face futures
mapped and plotted
but not,
of his own design

~~~~~

I burnt all his masks
courage came at a price

there was nothing I wouldn't pay

— Seren, Feb 07, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Critiques

M

magics02

16 years 4 months ago

Intelligent poem

It was only truth that he feared.. Powerful write Seren and I got it in more ways than once. The courage to face futures another great line there and this is a powerful and another great piece of yours aussie woman. Hope your doing better lovely lady. Friend Magics02 taps to you xoxoxoxo
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Mona

Thanks for the read huni ... this ones sensitive for me I debated for the last hour whether to post but we bleed for our art eh ?? thanks huni I am doing ok ... wont be around again for a week or two but I will be back love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
M

magics02

16 years 4 months ago

Understood my friend very much

Yes Aussie gal you get the rest from the art and know that we will be all here waiting for your lovely return. Stay sweet and well lovely lady Love Mona
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Ahhhh never need rest from

Ahhhh never need rest from my art its my lifeblood ... but sometimes life takes precedence you take care Mona (hugs) love Jayne-Chloe x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

its all about coming clean

its all about coming clean (hugs) ... and you dont have to, I know love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Dale

I will miss you all more (hugs) and many thanks for always being there love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
S

Stefan

16 years 4 months ago

Hi

LOVED TO RAW INTENSE FEELINGS, GREAT WORK. THANKS FOR THIS.
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Stefan

thanks for the comment and the read it is much appreciated kind regards love Jayne-Chloe
O

Orphani

16 years 4 months ago

You are the mother of so

You are the mother of so much beauty.The fields of so many flowers hold your name, and the dawn birds are listening for their song to return. Love B
NM

Nicole Michaels

16 years 4 months ago

Digging

Please come back to this poem when you are feeling better. I want to know more about the work of the crop circles, less about the masks, and more about the relationship between the two people in the poem, dramatically speaking. I think that's where your best write here is. I have an old sestina I'll send you.
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Hmmmmm not sure that I could

Hmmmmm not sure that I could expand this one without causing someone close to me hurt ... will think on it while I have my break ... there are more ways to skin a cat than one ;) love and hugs Jayne x x
the_fool

the_fool

16 years 4 months ago

beautiful!

loved it. is this a lover? a friend? a child? you should add much more to this. love the line'I burnt all his masks', have some work that relates to. very nice.
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear FoolI wrote this in a

Dear Fool I wrote this in a particular way so as not to cause hurt ... so to expand maybe hard but as I told Nicole above I will think on it love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
xena465

xena465

16 years 4 months ago

I'll miss you too...

This poem is so true for you that I feel it. I'll miss your comments. Come back to us soon. Roisna xena465
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Rosina

Thanks for the comment I am glad you could 'feel' I just called in to answer some comments I maybe get some time later to read a few poems well see how I feel love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
arja

arja

16 years 4 months ago

dear seren,

i like the way you've put the words together here..like a mystery, conveying itself one step at a time...leaving the reader to discover the message..but not cryptic... ..hope you'll be back soon! Take Care Always!
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Alone Yes!!!!! you got

Dear Alone Yes!!!!! you got the essence that I aimed for, mystery without revealing too much ;) glad you enjoyed it love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 4 months ago

Mystery becomes you...

I never know what to expect from you, and I always feel that the mystery is well worth your next write. Come back to us when you are rested and feeling better, Love and hugs, ~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Gee

Glad that I can keep you guessing ... cause if I become predictable ... I become boring, resting tonight feel like I been hit by a bus but I am ok you know me tough as nails love and higgliest bugs Jayne-Chloe x x x x x
Mark

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

Courage

His name is courage.. (my father speaking about my brother) Heart throbs with this poem.. (((Jayne))) Mark "some things change, some things do not"
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Mark

My heart throbs with you both ... love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x
VX

Venus x

16 years 3 months ago

Beautiful......Simple Truth

Venus Hi Jayne-Chloe **Smiles** Your pens are so heart felt, especially this one. Truth is a big issue for me. I don't care how bad something seems, the truth will always win in the end, as it seems to here in your words. Great pen and thank you for sharing, Hugs, Venus xxx
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Venus

I tell my kids there is nothing more freeing than truth and fully believe it ... sometimes though the truth and the consquences ... well theres another poem so glad you enjoyed this one .. its one thats close to my heart love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
Mark

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

In the school I belong to..

the truth can hurt very much but that hurt never destroys, rather, it heals.. Mark "some things change, some things do not"
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Mark

I agree truth is healing but sometimes in the first instant .... well I was devistated by a truth a long time ago took me 7 years to come to terms with it ... something that had been kept from me ... wont expand here but it was healing but it forever changed who I was ... so in my experience ... well its not always easier the road, accepting a truth sometimes can be a hard one ... thats what I meant by my above comment so glad you enjoyed this one ... it was a piece I felt compelled to write and I feel better now ;) love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Mark

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Seren

It took 30 years before I allowed myself to feel the pain. I landed in the hospital for a day. Truth of course is common to all. What we do not or cannot or will not deal with in our minds finds its way into our bodies and causes havoc. I learned this late and pay the price (which is not all so bad for me)daily by working at taking care of myself. We are all in it together yes? (what I am so clumsily trying to say) (((Jayne-Chloe))) Mark "some things change, some things do not"