Dark Musing

and so:-
You think bright future times
will simply cup the world
in folds of loving warmth
and building love
without a final victory
over conquest of all war

you believe our future bright,
regardless of all rotting
sickness gripping hard
those inner places where
our species used to feel:

the rape of family by
greed of mind as hollow
as the grinning skulls
it leaves behind,

the stink of hatred
rising from the burning flesh
of anger, caught in violence
as casual as breathing,

the gaze of innocents
as emaciated as their bodies
throwing back watched horror
waiting for their turn,

the keen of wailing grief
impotent against the crush
of murdered child
in sickened heart;

without a war upon all war
our future will be dark,
without warfare waged upon
those who relish violence
all our expectations
are eternally condemned
to living death of inhumanity
as natural as the thud
of beating heart,
and if the conquest
of our love of hatred
demands that those such as myself
must vanish from our world
so peace can finally reign

make me
extinct.

— Race_9togo, Feb 06, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Earth Vicinity (within a five light-year radius), ZZC

Favorite Poets: John Donne, T.S. Eliot, Serendipity, Emily Dickenson, Kailashana, Charles Bukowski, Kabir, Rett, Dalton, W. B. Yeats, William Blake, Rainer Maria Rilke, and many other Neopoet poets; Neopoet has heavily influenced my poetry and my ability to write it well.

Critiques

themoonman

16 years 4 months ago

Jim...

I think the title fits the content, although if you aren't happy with it, there are options. This poem sounds like my wife and I talking, she is the darker one, I have some faith in mankind to turn it around, the love, but it does seem bleak when you look around. She is of the mind that everything else is natural but man, many have that view... but I feel man is just as naturally here as is the trees and bees as well as everything man-made, for there is nothing man can make that doesn't come from nature to begin with... but it doesn't stop the reality of our need to impose our will upon others, with wars and religions and political agenda, for land and water and the ever popular oil. It does seem man is in a spiraling whirl to his doom, but I like to hope that there are some that see it coming and just maybe, man can survive his own greed. sorry for going on like that, your poem put me in a very reflective mood... thanks for posting it, enjoyed the read and the time spent.

Race_9togo

16 years 3 months ago

Hi Richard

Don't apologize, lol, considering what I just wrote! Its kind of funny, but its usually the exact opposite with me and my wife. I'm the gloomy one, while she tends to be more optimistic. Although lately we've both been seeing less and less in our world to be happy about. Thanks for reading Richard, I'm glad you enjoyed the time spent. Respectfully, Jim D. "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

magics02

16 years 4 months ago

Race good poem here

Just stopping here to read and I will come back again as this one captured the feeling and the meaning behind it for many all over the world. I like your interpretation and the ending was a good close. Hope all is going well even in a world of turmoil around us. peace Magics02

Race_9togo

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks magic

Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

Orphani

16 years 4 months ago

We are the warriors of peace

We are the warriors of peace each word stops a bullet, and each truth kills a madness of lies. write the fight in ink, or in blood. Peace. B

Race_9togo

16 years 3 months ago

Orphani

Ink And Blood We are the Warriors Of Peace each word stops a bullet and each truth kills a madness of lies write the fight in ink, or in blood. In both I have written and found ink the better less painful more powerful and unlike those written in blood the words the ink records last longer. Please forgive the liberty. I could not resist. Thanks man Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race