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Seren
Seren
Feb 06, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

found resting in words

I have run my fingers
 through black inked petals,
that trail to heaven

and sat at the feet
 of mountains
 listening to my poets
heart, beat

As I traveled each turn
    of the page,
     off to my left peripheral
    steadily an image has
emerged

as I grow ever more
 restful,  
the goddess strobes incandescent

and my hands,
            bleed lightning 


— Seren, Feb 06, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

The last line…. Jayne…

The last line.... Jayne... either lose it (it's already a given in the poem) or say what you mean... Otherwise for me it would be one of your absolute best. ~Mum
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Hmmmmmmm let me think on

Hmmmmmmm let me think on that ok ... bit tired will brainstorm a bit and see what I cannot come up with ... thanks for the advice mum always appreciated, to be honest the last line was a inner battle ... will go resolve it ;) love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
S

Stefan

16 years 4 months ago

Great

Do you mean that you receive inspiration that form the letters on the page?
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

I mean(my meaning,a reader

I mean(my meaning,a reader can take away whatever meaning they like ;) the joy of poetry) that as the pages have turned and as more and more inspiration comes ... I find peace kind regards Jayne-Chloe
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 4 months ago

to capture perhaps... just the air?

"I have run my fingers through black inked petals, that trailed to heaven" As you sit petalling your smoke signals, generated by the ink trails of your fingers, you meditate beneath the mountains of life to see, to breath the air of enlightenment, is this the image you mention I am curious as it is so important here, its magic thoughts casting their net to capture perhaps... just the air? Ethereal air! My love and Joe's too to you now Jayne, dear Jayne. Ann.
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

As each poem finishes I find

As each poem finishes I find more peace so with each word and in each act I am bringing myself to a inner peace ... love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Dale

Thanks for the comment ... the writing is calming for me I ahve a mind that go's a million miles an hour most days and in the words I find a steady cadence I guess and blank verse is not as easy as it looks you gotta get it just right or they suck lol love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

I was too tired this morning

I was too tired this morning to finish this so I was going to wait till later but I dreamed an ending and I like this one love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Annie

I was unsure of how to end this one, I've have finished it now see what you think thanks for the comment and the support (hugs) will be round tonight seeing what you are up to love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x x
O

Orphani

16 years 4 months ago

I see the last lines as an

I see the last lines as an integral part of the poem that ties into the first lines and expresses the poets power of release. I found this poem powerful and quite complete as written.love B
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Barry

you use the word release ... and thats exactly right in this instance, released ...thanks so much for reading this one it was one I had to fiddle with a little to get right but I am happy with it now ... love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
DS

Diatom Shells

16 years 4 months ago

buenas dias

This is chilling to me and I have always loved this new approach or post rhyming days keep it up dear I love reading them
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Shells

So glad you enjoyed this one and it was a pleasent surprise to see you posting again good to have you back dont stay away so long this time eh ?? and now I am going away for a couple of weeks take care huni and hope school is going well love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 4 months ago

Resting in Words

Lady Jayne Such peace and serenity a beautiful picture you paint Breathless wonderful Always Electric blue
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Maggie

Thanks for the read and the comment I am so glad you liked this one it was just one I hadnt finished and decided it needed to be love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Elizabeth

You always make me smile thanks for the comment I am always glad when my friends enjoy my scribbles love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

16 years 3 months ago

Wow, this is magnificent

Wow, this is magnificent Jayne, I really love it, I missed it (have missed almost everything of late!) God the architect has arrived... I'll return asap may be awhile though Beautifully done xxx in huge admiration Cheers Anni~ "To thine own self be true, and it must follow, as the night the day, thou canst not then be false to any man." ~William Shakespeare, Hamlet.
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Anni

You just made me crack up laughing ... I am a tad slow this afternoon ... and when I read god the architect was there?? I thought you were starting to say something poetic ... pmsl sorry but I did need something to make me smile thanks for that ... glad you liked this one its part of a whole series I have written and this one is one of seven ... I have them in sets now lol about different topics so as to sit them next to each other and get some real blending going on ... just trying ever trying different stuff ... I am going away after tonight so I will see you when I get back you take care of you, and try and get yourself back on track writing your words are missed, this I know ;) Kind regards Jayne-Chloe
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

Apropos 'the architect'

Ann of Norway Dear Jayne Chloe, Apropos 'the architect' we were in E's atelier/workshop sleeping in the middle of the night (1973) when there came a lnck on the door, and Berit Soot a Norsk artist cried out in a drunken voice, " Can so-and-so sleep with you?" and on hearing we were not interested and didn't have anywhere for him to sleep anyway, she then said something which we repaet and repeat as it was so 'very very important': "But he's AN ARCHITECT!!!!!!!" As if that gave him such status that he was bound to be allowed in, she probably had to put up with her drunken architect that night too! So when anything is dubious and involves an architect WELL what can one say? Just a litle bit to make you smile again Jayne, dear you. Ana
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Ann

That just cracked me up I will never look at a architect the same again LOL and I know a couple by the way I just read something you left about a tibetan prayer mat lol how funny is this I just wrote a poem with that reference in it lol ... weird or what ?? ... something for you love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
the_fool

the_fool

16 years 3 months ago

last line gave me shivers!

and i especially liked the first stanza with the black inked petals. but i agree with darknlovely, there should be much more to this one. hold on to it, i think you'll find something to connect this to that will give it deeper connections.
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Fool

thanks for the comment ... this ones part of a series of poems so in the end there will be expansion ... but when they are ready ... and this ones a slice nothing more a preview if you like ;) kind regards Jayne-Chloe P.S I forgot to mention 'last minute heaven' is where the reference to the black inked petals came from and the others a nod at another poem I wrote ... so instead of a preface maybe its more an appendix of other poems like in the end of the book lol
Pragyan

Pragyan

16 years 3 months ago

Jayne :)

So once again, you gave me sweet goosebumps. You are like a sorceress of words. Amazing poem. Love and regards Pragyan. :)
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Pragyan

Thanks so much for your lovely comment ... one of the other poets here sent me a statue of a lady shes called 'the enchantress' and sits on my desk lol my friend calls me the enchantress of the pen lol you comment made me glance over to her shes really beautiful ... thanks for dropping by will call round and see what you have been up to lately love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Mark

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

The last line strikes twice

Please leave it as I see your pen electrified .. Truly, Mark "I do not walk the earth and eat out of dumpsters, I'm not a bum, I'm beat."
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Mark

This ones done now I dont plan on doing anything more to it ... so happy you enjoyed it ... it was another that came from nowhere ... thanks again loved your newest poem it was wonderful hun love and hugs Jayne-Chloe