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Kailashana
Kailashana
Feb 06, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Rodolfo, Barry and Bukowski

you wear your puffy poet shirt
      into the conflagration of the dawn
           notes of me falling from your sexed-up sleeves

(I have sewn a thousand times)


it is cold and dark in the loft of our desire,
      we devour city lights, neon signs and trashcan lives
           a raw curved wind plays a red violin on your cupid's bow

you suit my purpose
      we are ribald with innuendo
           even Seinfeld (or Steinway) would be jealous of these tongues and fingers

(running rampant in our lives)

the applause sign is lit
      and we make all the pieces fit.
           like disheveled if not brave-hearted poems.

(lost in the somnolence of rhyme)


— Kailashana, Feb 06, 2010

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Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Sorry couldnt help myself

Sorry couldnt help myself PMSL ~!!!!!!!!!!! YOU TWO JUST CRACKED ME UP love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

You know what they say about

You know what they say about a woman who has her crack up, eh? (the things I don't do or say for la comedia!) http://www.fotosearch.com/bigcomp.asp?path=FSD/FSD352/x10249485.jpg to laugh with the Golden Buddha to weep with my broken wings, these are the masks that comedy and tragedy bring ~
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 4 months ago

Simply smashing, listen to the applause!

I can hear it in advance dear sister, and the swashbuckling vigour you expound in this ribaldry is scintillatingly startling and sensuously generative of joy. I don't know much about Bukowski or Rodolfo, Barry a little but probably not the half of it!!!!! Oh Great fun dear sister, my wild Anna, love from the more sedate!!! ? Ann. XXOO
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

Bukowski the poet…we meet

Bukowski the poet...we meet in the hereafter sometimes, and sometimes he whispers sweet fuck you's in my ears. but then I've come to expect that from him. Rodolfo is the poet from La Boehm, hence the reference to sewing (his Beloved Mimi was a seamstress.) And quit trying to fool us with *the more sedate*, who ya kidding? lol! xoxo Anna
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 4 months ago

Sedate!!!

I know Rodolfo then of course, it might have been another one. Well who knows!! About the sedate I mean, and as an old dame I have to keep up appearances, or what the hell, I know I am no...now I have no word for her... so I'm me and that's that, and all of you are fast learning that that me isn't 'sedate' okay touché!!!! Ah Mimi I hear her singing lovely lovely. Love to dear you Anna, Ann.
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

ROFL.I think keeping up with

ROFL. I think keeping up with you (if I were a man) would be quite fun, speaking of ribald. Who on earth wants to be sedate and not *go for it* with every living breath? There's enough time for that when we're gone with the wind. ~A
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Mum

Lovely present I hope thats hes appropriately thankful :P haha jj ... you suit my purpose we are ribald with innuendo even Seinfeld (or Steinway) would be jealous of these tongues and fingers loved that stanza love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x
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Orphani

16 years 4 months ago

The curtain scarcely raised

The curtain scarcely raised and the music in a moment is queued to this first act. A man on two knees vulnerable, battered and naked , in the sacrifice of pride, with three childish words.I love you. So within this is all there is, and oh yes a sturdy kitchen table, We all fall in love somtimes http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YQBWYfsCeC4
SR

Stuart Reiss

16 years 4 months ago

Hey ~A I’m also a fan of

Hey ~A I'm also a fan of the puffy shirt lol Especially loved the ref where they (Seinfield and Steinway) would be jealous of tougues and fingers lol... Cool write and the red violin...niccce Best regards Stu :-)
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

…as well as you should

...as well as you should be. I've written (and will write, I'm sure) many Bukowski poems, for he is a literary/poetic whore master, and I his whore, so to speak. Thanks for getting it all, Stu. ~A
DS

Diatom Shells

16 years 4 months ago

Um......

All I can say is WOW A I absolutely adore this there is so much to like, I think I may be getting fat. (exhales slowly) And I ask myself why must I stay away from here, this neo world?
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bjp

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Anna,

[(]Steinway) would be jealous of these tongues and fingers.... Terrific stuff. The New Jersey-Ohio axis of... verse! Brian
the_fool

the_fool

16 years 4 months ago

something original sounding

waded thru a lot before finding this title tonight. great work, but i think you captured bukowski more in your comment with the whispered fuck yous. keep these ones coming.
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 3 months ago

LMAO! That was great. And

LMAO! That was great. And great imagery. Had me laughing from Conflaguration and dawn in the same sentance. Good write. Hilarious, thanks for sharing this gem with us all. Julie D.D.
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 3 months ago

Well there was a serious

Well there was a serious side to this poem too, Julie. And conflagration meaning a large disastrous fire, is an event horizon, so to speak... n'est-ce pas? Thanks for reading, Julie. ~A