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Moments Past

As Time "whittles" away
what we're left with, is our worth
and how we mature, speaks volumns of our hearts,

and like the farmer and his crop
or the scientist with his yield
these are moments where each legacy starts.

In a maze of deep regrets
lies a pool of constant sorrows
where I find myself drop moments, oh so fast,

completely losing focus
because my attention's drawn
to roads ignored, and other moments past.

I exit from my worries
and second guesses seem to run
down my shoulders, off my back, towards the floor;

and my burden becomes lighter
as Truth calms my weary eyes
and regrets, and doubts become what to ignore.

Gentle, are my tides and waves
while the storms of Life subside
and my spirit stops enlisting Time to wait,

integrety lends creedence
as my soul sings songs of Hope
showing absolutely no regard for Fate.

Distant, are the shadows
that dance towards the Dawn
unobserved by vacant eyes that have no sight,

but, seeing is believing
and Truth promises to shine
just remember to respect the dark of night. 
— docmaverick, Feb 05, 2010

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Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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raskin

16 years 4 months ago

I think you support your

I think you support your first stanza well. The last one may need some work but I am not sure. The last line I'm not sure how that works with the second to the last line. I see the references to light and dark, time. The process of aging and maturing makes for interesting poetry. raskin
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 4 months ago

Thanx, Raskin....

...very much for the feedback ! I DID have a bit of trouble "funneling" everything together towards the end. I'm glad that it caught your eye. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
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raskin

16 years 4 months ago

I know, sometimes I will

I know, sometimes I will post something hoping someone will see a line that I'm not sure if it works but don't know how else to say it. Sometimes it just takes me walking away and looking again. I never know how to tell someone if something seems like trouble. I hope you don't mind, I do like your writing. I don't like messing to much with someone's poems. Only point out if something seems awkward. raskin
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 4 months ago

Hey, Raskin....

...I feel that, from you. I just now recieved this, this morning...(Saturday)... or, I would've responded sooner. No, seriously...that is good feedback, I thank you, profusely. Sincerely. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
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Antoinette Mar…

16 years 4 months ago

I loved this...don't change it at all...

I enjoyed the verse, "I EXIT from my worries and second guesses seem to run down my shoulders, off my back, towards the floor:" Marvelous...write I love the descriptive ways you hang on to feelings..and make them felt... as you say Please write on.. Dear Doc....Antoinette Mari
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 4 months ago

Thanx, Mom....

...you are a keeper ! Thank-you for always sending those words of encouragement, my way ! "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 4 months ago

Thanx, Roscoe....

...I'm seeing STARS ! Seriously, I really DO appreciate your reading AND taking the time to comment. Thanx, again. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.