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Seren
Seren
Feb 05, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

affaire de coeur

I was sprawled on red leather,the first time I was struckin a serenity of ebony silk and I was movingwhen all affectionleft the atmosphere ~~~ my clock windsever forward,but out 'there' time holds no meaning,(for me)black tendrils from night-land,reach downteasing my heartfrom its moorings,and relocate itto the moon  (along with all the otherflames of night)  ~~~ when I finally disembarked the HK , and the micehad all scampered to the attic Ben E.King made magicin moments and my affaire, with the universe had begun       
— Seren, Feb 05, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 4 months ago

Again you mesmerise our

Again you mesmerise our imagination and send the sensations of surreal images richly embedded with meanings into our minds and evoke the reflections of moonlit planets as if into the thoughts of a child. "had began" had begUn? In awe my Jayne Chloe of the magic mind's eye. Ann of Norway sends her respect and a scream of joy.
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

I always began my beguns lol

I always began my beguns lol haha thats horrid grammer eh ?? ... so glad you liked this one ... I was reading and something made me remember my nights driving to my grandparents, they would come pick me up and it was a long drive to get to their house he was the cheif ambulance officer in a nearby town so they would always pick me up at night ... and I remember laying on the backseat of their 6-7 yr old car and watching the night sky flash by and it was all the way back then I fell in love with the night lol ... so I wrote this thanks so much for reading Anskie Bird love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Dale

I am speachless at THAT(hugs) ... glad you enjoyed this one its a memory made poem love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Serene:

Simply beautiful! Time as we know it eludes everybody's grasp, and its meaning is equaly forbidden, except to our cravings and desires which keep it running. And of course --there we go again--, art makes everything a bit more coherent and comprehensible, even death. Your are right on target. Nice poem! Sincerely, Hugo
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dearest Hugo

I so appreciate your comment and your so right my friend art can make the incomprehensable into tangable breathing art of all forms ... love and biggest hugs Jayne x x
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Lunegirl

16 years 4 months ago

this is slightly different

this is slightly different seren!! visually beautiful as always with such great language, set out well leading from one stanza to the next in a fluid motion.. lovely...... is this what you have been doing on your break? love vix xx Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Vix

thats me lovely always different lol ... but your right this ones a happy memory something I always remember about my grandies ... they were wonderful people and this was my nod to them both so much of my childhood i remember being with them and some of them rubbed off on me my parents were not artists or big readers but my grandparents had a finger in every pie lol .. and this was a flash of inspiration sometimes I get them and today was one of those days ;) love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
yenti

yenti

16 years 4 months ago

Young Lady

The drifting memory, that time cannot hold, born to hold your ways forever. There a love of things that could only be true in the dreams of a child, keep these things safe in your heart and treasure them until that day when your red leather seat carries your thoughts to those you love, and those that love you, Yours Ian.T
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dearest Ian

Thanks for your wonderful comment ... you touch on something thats at the heart of this poem thanks for 'seeing' that ... love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Big Sis

You were one of the first to teach me to open my mind huni ... thanks for the comment its good to post something ... take care darlin I hope you are well I know I have missed you love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
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ziggy

16 years 4 months ago

hi

i am impressed wat an imagination a flash of inspiration indeed cheers ,,,,,,,,
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Ziggy

Thanks for the comment Ziggy I am so glad you liked this one ... thought maybe the references to things only australian might throw people off lol... love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Annie

Big smile friend ... very happy everyones liked this one I wasnt sure of it I never am lol love Jayne-Chloe x x x
O

Orphani

16 years 4 months ago

I am finding in your work an

I am finding in your work an increasing simplicity of expression that is peaceful in its reminiscent imagery. You are capturing your essence of thought with a keen exactness in your choices of subject and form. You are becoming a master in the art of dual symbolism.You are a poets poet my dear Jayne. Love B
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Barry

I think you maybe have hit on the change I am experiening of late ... at first I was making everything too confusing making it all too convoluted ... and simplest answer is usually the right one lol ... thanks for the wonderful compliment your a great poet in your own right and it means a lot coming from you ... love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
SR

Stuart Reiss

16 years 4 months ago

Awww Jayne…so sorry to

Awww Jayne...so sorry to keep missing new posts.. Congrats on the spotlight sweetie for this one Loovvvved the edition of a wonderful aussie icon lol Best regards Stu :-)
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Stuart

This was my first post for a week so dont feel bad you just caught me before I made off into the night have been having a rest ... Glad you liked that touch of Australia .. I was brought up a Holden girl and still own two lol ;) love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Big Smile thanks for the

Big Smile thanks for the smile Shells much appreciated glad you enjoyed it love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x