till day

beautiful work but I thought after 'sparkle of dreams' a line break would be appros and give the reader time to saok in the first lines ... loved it though I just think it needs a break where I suggested love and hugs Jayne-Chloe Edit .... and with that little thing sorted I starred you up ;) lol I just read Anna's comment HAPPY BIRTHDAYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY :D BIG SMILE may the petals of lotus blossoms line your path and may everyday be a new mystery to uncover for many more yesrs to come much love and big hugs for the birthday boy (hugs)

Oh that wind swept sand that fiercely stings the face, the bending grasses the lyre, and the sting the electricity of beauty. "As sunlight walks your hair" is a strange yet enticing thought. I shall have to further digest this before I say more dear Barry, You fling the reader here and there on those dunes and I must stand up to avoid becoming dizzy, will be back. Oh lucky lady, lucky lady she deserves it I know. Rock on dear Barry, rock on!! This is lovely, sensuous too. My love to you too from Ann of a grey snow day.

My darling Barry, 'tis your birthday today and I bear no gifts other than my love for you. I have nothing else to give to you, not even a poem for as sunlight breaks into dawn and the dawn feeds my emptiness, I am desire itself. Yours. Yours. ~A

O Barry boy, O Barry boy, I see it is your birthday boy, I'm happy for your happiness, and wish the elements to bless, as much else there is I could address, suffice it with my joy. You're a fine poet and no mistake, if I flatter you enough, I might get some cake, but oh no, its for another, so celebrate, my brother you couldn't have a better, better lover HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO YOU now, from Ann the ancient cow (well it rhymed!!- and it could be that wonderful one in Tutan Khamon's tomb studded with Lapis Lazuli and other precious stones the sight of which I give you as your present from me, he! he! or moo! moo!)