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washing tears
washing tears
Feb 04, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Oh My God

Oh my god I am dead again,
Lost in love but stuck in something, tired of always missing out,
On everything my heart lets pass by, sometimes I want to yell at the sky,
But I hold back and I break down and cry

Do you know what your love is for?
Do you know what to do when you face your fate?
Do you know what dreams are made of?
Do you even care, or are you just here to see…
Do you even care, or are you just here for me?
 
Oh my god I am lost again,
Drown in someone else’s dreams, of their thoughts and good intentions,
Struck down in the night again, the darkness is keen to bring you back
To the things you need least, memories of regret, anger and sympathy
 
Do you know what love is made from?
Do you know what keeps you awake at night?
Do you know what pulls you to me?
Do you even care, or are you just here to see…
Do you even care, or are you just here for me?
 
Oh my god I can see the light at the end of eternity
Oh my god I can feel the warmth of the sun in your eyes
Oh my god I can taste heaven here on your lips
Oh my god I can hear these songs of love I’ve been looking for
Oh my god I can smell the scent of glory in the shape of a child
Oh my god I need to know
Is this is love, or is fate in reality…? 

Do you even care, or are you just here to see…
Do you even care, or are you just here for me?

 


— washing tears, Feb 04, 2010

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magics02

16 years 4 months ago

I read

I read this one twice and I just thought the title might better be maybe (just my thoughts here) Do You Know or maybe Do You Care. Maybe, maybe not. It just seems there are many reps here but I still like it and I can not put my finger on it what is missing or if there is even anything is missing. Maybe someone else will point it out. Other then that a powerful write. Maybe a little tweak here or there and it's flow will continue. Magics02
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

I like it too...

and agree with magic. A little tweak here and there. Make you're feelings come across stronger on these two stanzas: Oh my god I am dead again, Lost in love but stuck in something, tired of always missing out, On everything my heart lets pass by, sometimes I want to yell at the sky, But I hold back and I break down and cry Oh my god I am lost again, Drown in someone else’s dreams, of their thoughts and good intentions, Struck down in the night again, the darkness is keen to bring you back To the things you need least, memories of regret, anger and sympathy Suggestions for a new title: `I Need to Know`? `Why Are You Here`? `Lost In Love` `Lost In You` Rosina xena465
washing tears

washing tears

16 years 3 months ago

agreed !

To you both, xena and magic, thank you for the time you invested on my poetry! hope you liked it primarily, however if you hated it i would love to hear that as well! both of your suggestions align with what i had thought of it when i finished. The repition in poetry sometimes annoys me but it works on occasion. The title does need adjustment, i just couldn't find the one thing to fully relate to the entirety of the poem. adjustments are coming, but i am lazy and usualy fix them on my computer file and never adjust them here! however for this one when i do adjust it i will repost it and let you both know! thanks again, any further suggestions, no matter how harsh, just let me know!=) -with what love could be- WT