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Quixote

before the unopposed light
I rose evenly to the patient soft hour
to the  taste of your eyes

in geometric circles
within windmills turning
 they fought in sleep

in an opposed reasoning
of lesser dreams
I subtracted  a feeble dawn

 from Quixote's journeying soul
unpossessed as yet
in opening 

I watched through windows
this enclosed darkness yielding
forgotten nights

deeper shadows on the streets below
where rain hides all traces
of how the door closes

and hero's fall 
beneath  folding hellos,
 and past neat good-byes
that your fingers deny
into waking 
— Orphani, Feb 03, 2010

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Orphani

16 years 4 months ago

In the dawning light of love

In the dawning light of love in this poem I am not bold.I see as dimly lit the path and struggles of life; but once in life with bandaged wounds, you mount the steed, and grasp the lance and ride to the hopless cause that is the only reason to live ; from which there is no return, and you are free. May we ride together into that blaze of truth. B
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

Most of the time, it’s not

Most of the time, it's not that we're too passionate, it's that we're not enough. However, I know another Barry. ;-) ~A "What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others and the world remains and is immortal." Albert Pine
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Orphani

16 years 4 months ago

Passion plucks the rose and

Passion plucks the rose and pushes within it's scent; but who can force apart the petals to know the true beauty within.I am nothing but a cloistered monk within the walls of you my beloved. B
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Barry

missing you all ... I am giving the extra star in advance ;) ... cause I know you will iron out any kinks and in case I am forgetful and miss the edits ;) love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
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ziggy

16 years 4 months ago

hi

hi barry how have you being i enjoyed this and your own comments also " in an apposed reasoning of lesser dreams i subtracted a feeble dawn "wat a LINE THAT really stands out to me if you go on to edit i will return cheers b ,,,,,,,,,ziggy
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Orphani

16 years 4 months ago

Time constraints make it a

Time constraints make it a little dificult to get the balance I would prefer at this time in my writing but I am working on it Zig and thanks for the support and kind words. B
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 4 months ago

rather a beside-river-ambulating flow

The windmill is revolving its poetry-like rhythm of sounds, I too was revolving into the poem and it gave me the feeling that it was a dance, not quite as hectic as the Whirling Dervish's, rather a beside-river-ambulating flow and I loved being taken off my feet and revolved. Day and forgotten nights alternating as I went and those eyes became the only lights. You are obviously a good seducer! Love to you(pl)Anskie bird.