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Recognition

There is someone in everyone of us, who gives us little nudge to step forward, to put up a little brave smile and gives us the strength to face the future, when deep down we are broken. It’s about us being stranger to ourselves. 

 

My heart roughly grasped,

Iron claws tempering its sinews.

Mirror reflects etched smile,

Perfectly, unevenly reaching the eyes.

 

Thousands suns upon me,

But profound trail of shadows.

Brave steps still forward,

Pretending ignorant of sheer bonds.

 

When realization dawned, atoned;

Found myself light years away,

Beyond veils of recognition.

I, a stranger to me. 


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Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Pragyan

Bravo really good write ... only have a couple of tweaks I would suggest Thousands (of) suns upon me, But (in/a)profound trail of shadows just a couple of ideas for this one but I really loved the theme well done' love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
Pragyan

Pragyan

16 years 3 months ago

Jayne :)

Thank you for reading my poem. Leaving the prepositions/article was deliberate. Because I wanted to make the poem to have 4/5 words pattern. I actually don't know (you see I am a novice), but can't I defy grammatical rules in poems? Waiting for your advice. Thank you and glad for your suggestions. Love and regards Pragyan. :)
Pragyan

Pragyan

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you... :)

It's interesting and intriguing to know and understand what we are. And I gave it a naive try. :)Thank you and I am glad that you read my poem. Regards Pragyan.
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MeanderS

16 years 3 months ago

beautiful write...

i completely agree wid Serenon.. removing those prepos will double the power of the poem. i really really like the 2nd stanza...brilliant.. as far as i have heard...you can defy grammar in poetry.... very very well.. bt i guess u'l have to talk to some 1 for little more light on the issue. anyways..n ya.. bt somewhere with all due respect i feel.... u cud have brot the link between the 2nd and the final stanza a lil more clearly. jus felt something amiss. congrats. a very nice read indeed.
Pragyan

Pragyan

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you... :)

I am glad for your advice and appreciation. I would definitely work further on this poem. May the stars watch over you. Pragyan