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Sorcerer

Cloaked in ragged robes of dark vermillion
a twisted, corpse-like being starts to sing
chanting words no throat was meant to utter
and snickering at thoughts of what they'll bring

His rotting, bony fingers gesture wildly
sparks of green Hell-fire kiss the air
filling every mortal soul with madness
and nightmare dreams of torture and despair

Bubbling corruption flows in rivers
inundating everything in sight
as ancient, flying Demons ride the darkness
bringing forth their own eternal night

A mindless evil swirls into existence
a crawling chaos covering the Earth
causing every living, breathing creature
to curse the very God who gave them birth

and as his final howls dissolve in silence
he kneels before a thing no eye should see
and it, in turn, proceeds to nibble slowly
this self-same fool who dared to set it free


C.  Lon  R.  Bruso
— Lonnie, Feb 02, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New England, originally, now, Macon, N.C., USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, Bob Dylan

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

It scares me to know how

It scares me to know how well you know the sorcerer. HA! ~A "What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others and the world remains and is immortal." Albert Pine
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Lonnie

16 years 4 months ago

Thanks, Anna!

Perhaps I may have been one in a former life, who knows?
Mark

Mark

16 years 4 months ago

ohh God

A great way to express it as I see it. A paradox is left up to the reader in the first line. It really depends on how one percieves the content vs the deffinitions of vermillion. As to your questions the language is all there; rhythmn, sound, rhyme and experience. The first and last stanza mate (not that they need to) This is masterpiece pupular hehe (spotlight) in my opinion Lon.. Awesome reading, Mark "some things change, some things do not"
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Lonnie

16 years 4 months ago

Thanks, mark!

Your insights and opinions are always appreciated!
Victorclaude

Victorclaude

16 years 4 months ago

Lonnie,

Sounds like a good day on capitol hill. I certainly would not want to see one of the nights. Victor Claude
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Lonnie

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you, Victor!

I had nothing Political in mind when I wrote this, but Oh well, if that's how you perceive it, so be it! Glad you stopped by to read and comment!
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poewriter58

16 years 4 months ago

Lon

I dare not touch a word of this poem. Excellent as alwasy. All elements of good writing have been met. You just keep getting better and better Me Chrys
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Lonnie

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you, M'Dear!

I strive to please! and, with your talent as a lighthouse to guide me, how can I not succeed?
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Lonnie

You are a virtuoso of verse ... you pull it together and make it flow and sometimes ? I get so engrossed that I forget its rhyming poetry ... always a mark of excellent verse imo love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
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Lonnie

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you, Jayne!

As always, your comments are most welcome! I'm pleased that you have enjoyed another of my poems!
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Lon

This is so good I am almost jealous. You really give Eddy Styx a run for his money! This piece is clever and well thought out. Always, Cat
Mark

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

Re-visit

is that alliteration in L-1 S-2 ? Gee.. Mark You are the leaf, I am the tree. Cling onto me, I'll grow into you. http://www.neopoet.com/node/36042