docmaverick

Feb 01, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Picture That !

Twin boys were born to a lady, fair
on a non-eventful day,
two mouths to feed gave her quite a scare
so, she sent one far away.

She sent one boy off to France
Ahmal was his first name,
with one son she'd have half a chance
though she loved them both the same.

Juan was frail and would eat much less
so 'twas poverty, made up her mind;
she kept the son who'd cost much less
and her conscience was so unkind.

On her birthday, Juan gave to her
a photo of him, as a gift;
but, her loneliness concerning Ahmal
sent her heart floating adrift.

She asked Ahmal for a photo
and for forgiveness, if he'd understand;
for she felt bad she'd sent him to go
to an adoptive, family grand !

Well, a photo never did appear
though she felt her request was, small;
she smiled, as she shed a final tear
for if you'd seen Juan, you'd seen Ahmal.

— docmaverick, Feb 01, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

Critiques

U K Atiyodi

16 years 4 months ago

Picture that

To discard one is cruel. Even if it is symbolic, it smacks of savagery. I cannot discard the faith in motherhood which is godly. Perhps modern world does not attach much importance to it. The poem is good.

greeneyes

16 years 4 months ago

Beautiful,sad, haunting,

Beautiful,sad, haunting, what more can i say, I loved it.

weirdelf

16 years 4 months ago

I feel like I've read this before

was the gist of it in one of those emails that circulate? Mate, oh mate, if I could reach down the screen and slap you upside the head I would. Ending a poem with a pun! For shame! Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible

docmaverick

16 years 4 months ago

Yeah, elf....

...I can see where you'd like to "pun" me in the mouth. Sorry, 'bout that. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

You’re a strange man, Doc.

You're a strange man, Doc. But I get you, what does that say about me? This clever poem of yours evokes all sorts of things that seem more like a train wreck in my mind. Well done. ~A "What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others and the world remains and is immortal." Albert Pine

docmaverick

16 years 4 months ago

Great minds....

...think alike, Kailashana !Thank-you, for the vote of confidence. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.

docmaverick

16 years 4 months ago

I had....

...a bit of an empty epiphany, where the void was sooo dense that, nobody could explain or rationalize what was going through my head, at any given moment. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.

Lonnie

16 years 4 months ago

Tons of Pun, er, I mean Fun!

Still chuckling from this gem! Methinks you may have outdone yourself, my good fellow! Great write!

docmaverick

16 years 4 months ago

Lonnie the "pun-pal"....

...knows from what of which I speak ! Thank-you, my good sir...for gracing my endeavor with your positivity. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.

Antoinette Mar…

16 years 4 months ago

well...Doc...

I may as well get on the band-wagon and say this was a hoot! LOL you are a clever one...we know Antoinette Mari

docmaverick

16 years 4 months ago

Glad, Antoinette....

...to have you "aboard"! Thanx for the feedback...but, it doesn't say much about your sense of humor, though. L.o.l. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.