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the snake

the snake

 

barking dogs and children,

lamplights in a fog,

come each day at sundown,

the glass is filled with grog.

 

put the children in their beds,

sit by the lantern light,

talk of life and all its pain

deep into the night.

 

you think of things you’ve never done,

you think of that that’s passed,

you think of how it might have been,

until there is the last,

 

last is always never first,

last is clever and cold,

last pours forth the scent of light

from unforgotten mold,

 

mold of life, indeed, itself,

mold that will never break,

mold the alchemists sought for

is hidden with the snake,

 

snake is laughing silently,

snake will never tell,

all it knows and ever was,

like the ringing of a bell

 

bell the angels rang at first,

bell that shall not break,

bell that mother earth does hold

inside her with the snake.

 

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— Victorclaude, Jan 31, 2010

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Country/Region: USA

Favorite Poets: Wallace Stevens, D. H. Lawrence, Charles Bukowski, Bob Dylan, Leonard Cohen, Henry Wadsworth Longfellow, Percy Bysshe Shelley, T. S. Eliot, E. E. Cummings, Emily Dickinson, William Butler Yeats, Pablo Neruda, Joni Mitchell, William Shakespeare, Basho, Elizabeth Barrett Browning, Samuel Taylor Coleridge, Kelly Marie Hayner, Susan Wydville. D. Phillip Caron, Elizabeth Bishop.

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Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Wow Victor only one gripe

Wow Victor only one gripe hun you think of things you’ve never done, you think of that that’s past,(you think of (ALL) thats past you think of how it might have been, until there is the last, loved this write it had a wonderful pace and it followed through the whole way love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

The snake, immortal shall

The snake, immortal shall rise once again and again; awakened ascending through these tears of bliss ~A "What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others and the world remains and is immortal." Albert Pine
Victorclaude

Victorclaude

16 years 4 months ago

Anna,

I am not certain what your reply means, but it is arcanely pretty. Thank you very much. Ciao, Victor
Victorclaude

Victorclaude

16 years 4 months ago

Jayne,

I also thought of using the word "all" where you suggested, but within the context of the poem, the words "that that's" is referring to a specific "that", so to use the word "all" would change the entire meaning of the work for me. It shall stand as written. There is no beauty, and in this case, no meaning, without a flaw which is no flaw at all. I sincerely hope this makes sense. Thank you very much for your input. Ciao, Victor
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Victor I bow to your vision

Victor I bow to your vision and do see the reasoning in it ... I had actually thought in my tiredness it was a typo/mistake but now have reread it and get what you mean ... as I always say my suggestions are just that if they are crap, trash em lol love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x
Victorclaude

Victorclaude

16 years 4 months ago

Jayne-Chloe,

The 'that' of which I speak in this poem is Vietnam where I spent, or misspent three years of my youth, that marred an early life with grief so deep that no comforts of the world will requite the lost joy, but taught me a peaceful way to go, and opened my eyes to things that may otherwise would have remained hidden. Don't be hard on yourself, Jayne; your suggestion was a good one, and I see perfectly how the wording may be misconstrued. With fondness, Victor
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poewriter58

16 years 4 months ago

Victor

you think of that that's pst I think you may have meant all that's past or you might consider that,that has past and as I see you have already commented on this item not use the conjuction I'm sorry but your first line,I'm sure was not meant to be amusing but the way it is phrased barking dogs and children conjures an image of children barking along with the dogs my apologies for finding that amsuing perhaps barking dogs and sleepy children? I do so like the format you have used and the content of the poem is excellent Chrys
Victorclaude

Victorclaude

16 years 4 months ago

Chrys,

"barking dogs and children conjures an image of children barking along with the dogs my apologies for finding that amusing." No need to apologize -- I find it rather amusing myself, although you are the first to point this out. Children often do create a cacophony as do barking dogs. I like your sense of humour. Thank you most sincerely for your input~! Ciao, Victor
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

Our wisdom lies not in what

Our wisdom lies not in what we think we understand, our foolishness lies in that we think we know anything. Every question and answer unfolding in(to) the next moment. Experiences, not judged, it is what it is. Love. ~ "What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others and the world remains and is immortal." Albert Pine
Victorclaude

Victorclaude

16 years 4 months ago

Anna,

"Our wisdom lies not in what we think we understand, our foolishness lies in that we think we know anything." I agree with this wholeheartedly, however there are some things that we do know for certain: hitting your finger with a hammer hurts, lemon juice is sourly sweet, ice is cold, water is wet, fire burns, trees are plants, etc.. Knowing and understanding exist in separate realms, but they both have a great attachment to comprehension, which lives within the mind of the one who comprehends. To one a coil of rope is just a coil of rope, but to another it may be mistaken for a coiled serpent.