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Good Day

Killer looked around, all wide eyed and staring

There were lots of families here, he saw people sharing

He was so amused, seeing youngsters chase each other

Heard them shouting, laughing... smiling father, doting mother

 He was on vacation... for too short a moment

The scene here was pleasant, not his usual torment

The rides here such great fun, they really made him dizzy

He thought that maybe now, he'd had too much  that's fizzy

The music here was awful fun

He did things he wouldn't have done

If he had, stayed at home

And didn't have the urge to roam

Something nagging peace of mind

A nasty thought of some kind

That man with the little child... that one over there

He stood right behind her, kept stroking her blonde hair

Why should it bother him, what had set him to thinking?

He knew that it was wrong, his heart was slowly sinking

He watched them both for some time, they didn't seem to match

Then the picture he had seen... The girl who had been snatched!

He saw it all so clearly now, it was an Amber Alert

He had to stop, this bad man... before the girl got hurt

The fun had drained from him now

But he would fix, this thing somehow

He followed them from ride to ride

Watched the man look side to side

Guiding her to back of scenes

Killer knew what that would mean

As the man made up his mind

Killer came from behind

He yelled to her, she should run

As he prepared, for some fun

Peverted smile changed to hate

As the guy lost her fate

Killer said; 'Go find a cop'

As he made this man... a mop

Fear ran through this asshole's eyes

He knew he'd lost, his 'dad' disguise

Pants open, and his belt undone

He'd been stopped before his fun

Killer grabbed the offending tool

The monster then began to mewl

Ripped from the roots, the blood did spurt

Killer said; I hope this hurts

Stuffed in his oral cavity

A sign of his depravity

They found him giving... himself head

A last peversion... face bloody red

Now Killer could enjoy the day

The troubled thoughts all gone away

Pleased that things worked out so well

Another pervert has gone to hell

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

— Geezer, Jan 31, 2010

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Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

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Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Gee

Couple of spots need a tweak but other than that a solid write .... and this time lol I was rooting for killer ;) The rides here such great fun, they really made him dizzy (He was really glad, he hadn’t much of soda fizzy)---this line needs a tweak just didnt flow smoothe for me ,... but that could be just me lol love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x oh what is an amber alert ??? no clue never heard of it before
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 4 months ago

Rooting for Killer...

I wasn't going to post it so soon, but thought I had lost it. When I found it again, I was excited and posted it before taking the time to go over it. I will edit it in a little bit. I was going to call the park Disney World but, didn't know how that would go over, so I just said it was an amusement park. An Amber Alert is named for a girl that was snatched a few years ago. She was found because an immediate alert was posted by the authourities over all highways that have electronic signs that give warnings about dangerous conditions.They gave a brief description of the car, plate, her, and she was found. They also put pictures on T.V. of her and supposed abductor. Now such an alert is called an Amber Alert. I will work on the tweaks real soon, as I want Killer to be in top shape. Carrie and I are working on making a poem book of Killer and DeMona. We have had such a great response to their teaming up and the ensuing romance between them, that we figure that we can do something with it. As always, thanks for the read, and Killer says thanks for rooting for him. ~ Love and big hugs, take your well earned rest and get back to work here real quick. ~ Gee
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hardcorechick28

16 years 4 months ago

THAT WAS AMAZING

I LOVE IT!!!!!! Killer has a heart after all!!!! My favorite part is when they find the offender giving himself head!!! What an appropriate way for him to die!!!! And of course, happy ending for the little girl involved!!!! Well written!!!!
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 4 months ago

I don't know...

about amazing, but Killer just did the right thing. Thanks much, for the read on your break. I know you don't have much time. Glad you got high score on your test. Talk later, Gee
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hardcorechick28

16 years 4 months ago

thanks

glad i did well on that one test..another one coming either thursday or friday....2 down, 2 to go and then the final....talk later
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 4 months ago

I appreciate...

you understanding that Killer does need a vacation now and then, and that he would never stand by and see a child hurt. He may have his faults, [like cannibalism]and fits of rage, but he loves kids and animals. So I guess he isn't all bad. LOL ~ Gee