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ThreeTrinities Away

Three trinities away



Since I was born

I learnt of what all recognition is

If you know someone higher up

You also are known around,

So that’s how one has to be found.

 

Some beauties lay hidden down

And trodden

As it doesn’t permit them to be laden

For others it’s a one way ticket to fame where’s the shame

Where fame’s the name of the game

 

Hereditary lives are not

Hidden in genes alone

They need to have been sown

Surfaced as one wants to know

Who all you know

Who all you own

Who all, you also own.

 

I gave up the battle cry

To earn a name

But I love

Glorification all the same

So I had to find a new name

Thus anonymous

I finally became

 

Now my name is

LH, lhlhlh

As I now profess

They all run after me

To hold my hand

Some ask me to lie

Some to stand

But shamelessness is seeded

Within, sorry to say

Some are married me

Single women too search within

Perhaps could I be a likely lesbian.

 

I’m sure many a gay

Must want to play

His way

But kids too woo

Yet not know

What glory basks

In any show

You don’t know

who‘s the actor on stage

Till you unfurl the scene

In rage agree to act as a page.

 

But when you are

Three trinities away,

I meant eternities to say

Then none would’ve

Remember your way

Whether at all,

If at all

You did ever walk

This world’s way

 

So leave behind the urge of an award play your tune of your own accord

Many’ll pull you down like cockroaches do let that not ever irritate you

For such folks give you a platform

To lay them nude,

As they are prude

As they on their own

Get petrified

You are great

You’ve achieved

Your God granted pride.

 

So move on without regard

For a Nobel

It will only more trouble spell

Move on

Move on

Move on

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

— loved, Jan 30, 2010

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themoonman

themoonman

16 years 4 months ago

Loved...

I saw LH in another poem of yours and had no idea who or what you were referring to. I am guessing that English isn't your first language... is that correct? This poem, as in some of the others I've read from you, misdirects the reader... by that I mean with the punctuation. You start each line with a capitol letter, indicating that it is a new line but in many cases it is actually finishing a thought, stumbles the read. Also, there are places in this write where a line could have more of an impact if it were longer, said with no pausing. Do read your poetry aloud, it makes it much easier to find where the stops should be, and then put them to page in that way, and direct the read so your reader will catch the rhythm of your voice with their own. With all of that being said, I believe this poem could be more affective to your readers if it were shorter, more to the point. There are also some word choices I would change, but I will wait and see what you do with this information first.
loved

loved

16 years 4 months ago

thanks a lot

i am grateful to you. in authspot they insist that every first letter has to be a capital or else their computer doesnt pick up . as far as english is concerned it may humour you to know that i speak smile laugh think weep and cry in english birth notwithstanding. i will hope fully take your advice in the next one i post this one is too lengthy for me to reapply my mind as my target at the other site will take a week to acccomplish when i may be able to revert. in the mean time i'd appreciate ur words suggestion so that i may incorporate in the revision . thank you sir LEARNER POET . I MAY ADD ONE GREAT POET SOME YEARS AGO HAD TO SAY I HAVE A LONG WAY TO GO SO I HAVE NOW COME ALONG WAY ISN'T IT SO???PLEASE DO LET ME KNOW HOW LONGER STILL I'LL HAVE TO GO RGDS URS LOVED FOR LH PL READ AND SEE LOVED