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It's our fire now

Gloria! Gloria! Come home you birds-eye view 

from the big, humid blue, these rooftops 

scrape your paradise true as we're all 

guilty of something, not worthy of anything 

but absolution through a penal code, a 

kinky design,- our fathers' belts will do for now, 

till we're prostrate in front of You

Have pity then

Whisk us in Sulphur and Medicine Blues

and news of good prospects in space?


— doorman, Jan 29, 2010

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yenti

yenti

16 years 3 months ago

Doorman

Liked the story behind the words there needs to be more middle and a better ending, just have a read of others works leave comments and meet us and we will be there for you to write more, Yours Ian.T
doorman

doorman

16 years 3 months ago

Never really felt done with

Never really felt done with this one. But some writes get left behind. Very grateful for your comment, thanks. I'll see what I can do with this. Regards, Espen.