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silver ribbons of moon

eyes have become
resolute,
wandering the walls
and fixtures

roaming epoch,

hands that mercury envies
read the craters,
and each aperture glows

with sterling egress,

lips part as two half's
of miracles,
and the first tide

rolled to birth,

as quicksilver lies with
the stars,
cannoned beauty falls

in silver ribbons,

writhing bound
and full this night,
eclipsed

in sheets of moon

— Seren, Jan 29, 2010

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Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

EGRESS, EPOCH, APERTURE

'Epoche' An epoch is a term used to denote a particular phase in history, in particular one which is held as remarkable or noteworthy. It could refer to a noteworthy event which marks the commencement of such a period. It is also used as a unit of geologic time which is a division of a time period. In the field of Astronomy it implies a particular instant in time which is arbitrarily chosen as a fixed point of reference. It is also applied to mean a memorable event or date. The term epoch comes from the Medieval Latin word epocha, meaning a measure of time; which possibly comes from the Greek term epokh, meaning a point in time. A synonym for the noun epoch is the term era or period. ~~~~ • EGRESS (noun) The noun EGRESS has 3 senses: 1. (astronomy) the reappearance of a celestial body after an eclipse 2. the becoming visible 3. the act of coming (or going) out; becoming apparent Familiarity information: EGRESS used as a noun is uncommon. • EGRESS (verb) The verb EGRESS has 1 sense: 1. come out of Familiarity information: EGRESS used as a verb is very rare. ~~~~ • APERTURE (noun) The noun APERTURE has 3 senses: 1. a device that controls amount of light admitted 2. a natural opening in something 3. an man-made opening; usually small Familiarity information: APERTURE used as a noun is uncommon.
C

CyberSpace

16 years 4 months ago

fucking orsm baby lol and

fucking orsm baby lol and thanks for the word def's love hubby xoxoxoxoxoxoxox
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

No worries i told you I

No worries i told you I would lol love you darlin and thanks glad you liked it wifey x x x x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

Our Seren is now explaining

Our Seren is now explaining her poetry????? Oh, woe is me. ;-( Pity that. ~A "What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others and the world remains and is immortal." Albert Pine
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

Yeah. But he holds you day

Yeah. But he holds you day & night, so what does he need to know? Wink. Mommy Dearest "What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others and the world remains and is immortal." Albert Pine
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 4 months ago

OMG!

Seren you have waxed and wanned and eclipsed both solar and lunar all at the same time here! You have me sliding down the celestrial beams and grabbing the ribbons as I paraglide down in the argent shimmer of your selene sky setting! Personally I didn't need the wording explaining but I am just a big head lol! Bloody Englishman you'll probably saying... know it alls they are!! But don't worry I can turn my head sideways to fit through the door frame :) Love this as it actually has a ying yang feel of male and female opposite of light and dark side of the mmon intertwined as one entity and you lush lyrical overture theme make it fantastic reading that oozes from your mouth as you dribble all over the page... don't ask how many flies I caught before snapping out of the brillaint and beautiful images you created here and closed my almost locked jaw! A-W-E-Some Jayne! Dale :)
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Dale

I was looking at the full moon through my telescope last night and this came to me ... I was going to post another one I have been working on but I will post it tonight and it will be my last poem for a little while ... I think I need a break I feel like I/my poetry is stale so a break is always a good thing so glad you liked it my friend and I really appreciate you having a read of it ... not everyones cup of tea but I liked it myself lol this ones for me lol love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe c c c
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 4 months ago

Hey Jayne!

I will say you'll be missed... I've not been here long but I do find your one of the best poets on here! I just love the way you match words on a page and seemlessly make them flow... put it this way, I wish I could write on the same level as what you do! Put it this way if wanted someone to guide my writing on here, i'd pick you... you use your pen like an artists brush, virtuoso of wordsmithing for my mind's eye. I know prias ein such a manner may not be of the best use Jayne but if I cannot write to your level how could I possible critique something that I could never pen myself in a million years. Everyone seeks to improve and so i do hope you little time away give some body to thought and bolsters your spirit ands boon your soulful pen, I do hope you return reasonably quickly though as I so enjoy coming here and for half an hour or so sumerging myself in your thoughts and poetry. Take care my friend and rest easy... Dale :)
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Dale

I will still pop in once or twice a week just not posting for a lil bit going to give my body a much needed rest no goodbyes just a nana nap lol ... and its been a huge twelve months and I decided a couple of days back to give it a rest(and you guys) lol ... lately my batteries are running on low and I need to recharge and with some added energy I hope I can come back a little fresher and maybe with some fresh ideas ... thanks for the comment its good to know I will be missed ... but not as much as I will miss all of you love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Dale

See this is one of the things I love about Neopoet ... always learning for me ?? is the best gift and its funny I know a little about P.T Barnam but havent heard that story and its a beauty Dale thank you love and biggest hugs Jayne x x x
M

Millage

16 years 4 months ago

Really good Hun!

JC. You have come up trumps here babe. I love the words you use and the clever way you use them! Great stuff.....as usual ;-) Much love Millage x
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Mile man

I dont know what happened but I missed answering this one and I cannot say I didnt get the email cause I did lol love you huni and I hope you forgive me for my stuff up cant understand how I didnt answer you ... biggest hugs and love Jayne-Chloe x x x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 4 months ago

I read it!

I didn't really understand it, but I love the way you brought all those words together to make a story that had me wondering! And as for Snake, all he needs to know, is that he has a special person to hold each night. Love and hugs, ~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dearest Gee ~!!!!

I am sure I didnt get an email for this one because I definately would have remembered getting a message from you ... thanks for the read ... I might repost another version of this without those words but with similiar more known ones ... just as a exercise for others to see where they can go ... thanks for the idea Gee you gave it to me lol love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 4 months ago

Been kinda out of it...

For the last few days have had bad headaches, so if I sounded kinda funny [odd] you can put it down to that. Been under lots of stress for awhile and guess that it just caught up with me. Stress still there, but headache gone now, and ready to roll. I am always happy when I give someone ideas, that means they were paying attention. LOL Love and hugs, Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Gee,I will still call

Dear Gee, I will still call in everynow and then to see what everyones been up to ... like today lol ... you take care of you and i am glad your feeling better hun ... I will post the revised version of this one when I get back love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x