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Train Ride

Another train ride,
to little expectations of delight but he, always there
watching, waiting
caught my eye
tall dark smooth and enticing such a carnal instinct came about me
I had to reach out and touch
whispered in his ear
"take me here" hands like water sweeping over me
his tongue, those lips
so wet, so soft
trailing my body knowing there target in open air for all to see
eyes staring from there corner
concentrating, contemplating
mind lustfully salivating passing through tunnels
constant illusion of strobe lights
making an erotic show
of bodies in pure delight deeper and harder,
faster and louder
climax coming full speed ahead
an eruption of  lucid ecstasy snap back to reality,
just another long train ride
— DimondDivinity, Jan 28, 2010

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thewaitingroom

16 years 4 months ago

WOW!

All i can say is this is very hot.I like it,very well written and thought out.I will keep looking back to your poems for examples.I dig your style,thanks so much for your posting!.
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DimondDivinity

16 years 4 months ago

i hear you miss annie, i

i hear you miss annie, i wont ever change i might change here and there to spin people around and just test diffrent waters, but this is my home and you always come back home, thanks again for always reading!!!!! Keyanna
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heartbreaker

16 years 4 months ago

wow another great no not

wow another great no not great titillating write diamond girl you have a way with words i love the ending please dont change your style these writes are so yummy
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DimondDivinity

16 years 4 months ago

yes punctuation and grammer

yes punctuation and grammer even spelling is not my strong point, i read alot but i never had a reason to punctuate or use proper grammer because i always wrote for my own personal pleasure Keyanna