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jove
jove
Jan 27, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Wounds that won't heal

 Some wounds remain raw, some never do heal,
some buried within forever to bleed.
Some are invisible yet oh so real,
some are inflicted through thought word and deed.
These wounds carried inside never healing,
gifts of misfortune, revenge, and hurt pride.
Agonies tools rend our hearts revealing,
a need to forgive, for pain to subside.
No poultice, nor bandage. will staunch the flow.
No quick fix, nor patch, will do in a pinch.
No excuses, nor placebo will fare.
These wounds that won't heal, will forever show,
the ugliest scars from which we all flinch.
Just turn your heads, and pretend they're not there.

by jove 
— jove, Jan 27, 2010

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Region, Country: British Columbia, CAN

Favorite Poets: me, ... what can I say I can't dance. lol

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themoonman

themoonman

16 years 4 months ago

Jove...

Hi, your poem here has a good message, it is much easier to look past another persons wounds than our own, flawed things that we are huh. I felt the rhythm in this piece wasn't quite there, may just be me, how do you feel the flow did? Richard
jove

jove

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you for your time and effort Richard.

Thanks, ya, it does have a valid message there; one we all share. The sonnet is fine for what it is. I am sure it is far from perfect. Yet,the basic requirements are in order 14 lines, Iambic pentameter, yada yada ,lol. Also, as I have read it so many times, I have become comfortable reading it, and I don't remember if it felt a wee bit out of whack the first time I read it . Let's see what someone else has to say about it ! Third opinion . Thanks for reading it, as I kinda think the message here was more important to me than the wee imperfections, I did not tighten it up as well as I could have; as I have done with many others. I can perform a proper crit on, and know how and what to do when it comes to a sonnet! I have written very many over the years. I also hate doing it anymore, It gives me head ache , let the youngsters with something to prove have a go at them , I have torn apart hundreds of sonnets iamb by iamb .What a pain in the butt! I used to belong to all the sonnet forums; man did I take pounding on some of those places ! Talk about grinders and shark tanks . Not for the faint of heart . I got skin like a frickin' elephant now. lol By Jove !
jove

jove

16 years 4 months ago

You were right after all!

I went over it again and you were right. I was one iamb over in one line . Good ear/eye ya got there ! lots of practice I suppose! lol Thanks again Richard By Jove !