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Daughter of 'Aye dor dare'

1)
Ember hair tossed wild, peridot eyes burned bright
moon pale skin, downy and fair
her bare velvet feet dirty 
torn garments soiled
but for this she had no care

for demons hunted her wedding eve
acres long, she toiled in flight
fleeing, through flower strewn fields 
spilt milk, moon glens
 tired muscles burned, fire red lungs

through valleys, hills, she stumbled, flailed
determinated to not be caught
she panted and huffed
her chest heaving rough
she thought of her mother fraught

Cold, dead-end cliffs, halted flight
on this stormy, fearsome filled night
with only shawl wrapping her frame
she stared deep the water, calling her safe
and arced, breath stunned, eyes locked tight....... 


2)

With worry and strain all her teaching in vain
for to long had her daughter suffered
at the hands of the many
who had more and plenty
well no more would the wrongs be covered

she'd tell of the story, tell of the tale
of her beautiful daughter now dead
jumped off the cliff at  'Aye dor dare'
sailed through the air in a leap off the top
landing wreckless sea, now her bed

promised to a sweet man, king of his cottage
temperate in mannor, loin in heart
her beau of childhood
meant to be wed on the eve of Hens galen
their lips though, were never to meet

for lord of the manor, man of might
her daughters mean employer
had other intentions mean of heart
lusting her
he was preditor, prowler...

well, thought her mother, anguished in loss
of this there will be no more
she peered up, seeking Nemesis 
preying for advice for revenge
the death star felt sorry for this woman poor,

the sea roared her name
nemesis showered meteor
the winds wracked down his doors
mother stood watching
at his sanity she started to claw

Oh lord of the manor, so greedy
and thick, in his lust grown
tormented and turbulent
till the girl consumed his thoughts
and in his sickness, was slain




 





 

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Baz

16 years 3 months ago

Hi Madam F

Just F*****G beautiful. In my earlier comments to you I said you had talent but that your spelling and punctuation was crap! Either you have done a crash course in English or you were having us on! Whatever your poetry is great, not sure about the last line though: "and in his sickness was slew". If you kill someone you slew them, or he was slain. Have to think about that one.
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Lunegirl

16 years 3 months ago

Hello Baz,I have found the

Hello Baz, I have found the spell checker lol, also people still mail me and as you have feedback spelling errors, which i am so greatful for!! I had, slain for the last line as i agree with you, but when i spell checked it came up with slew so i thought maybe i had go it wrong, I will go back and review ; ) I found this poem a bit of a struggle, i started it with the intension of mixing old style with urban chav but this spilled out instead. Vix
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Vicki

This is a turbulent tale of love and lust, which I enjoyed very much. I am happy to read that the lord of the manor finally got that which he deserved. An excellent read. Always, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Vix

Big Smile ... we knew you had 'something' and now its good to read this one and 'know' we were right lol wonderful poem I am sitting grinning love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
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Lunegirl

16 years 3 months ago

awww thanks Jayne-chloe,I do

awww thanks Jayne-chloe, I do like this one, but i am looking forward to carving out some hard hitting ones, that cut close to the mark... I feel like i need to unlock something inside myself to really achieve lol, so cheesy!! glad this made you grin love vix xx