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Timed lightning

I can hear the thunder rolling
in the stillness of a night
I can see the lightning flashing
its white fire burns me bright

I reach to touch a strand
to only feel my hand go numb,
it starts to coil my arm
and wraps around my thumb

I can feel a gentle pulsing
coursing through my soul,
and suddenly the wind blows
its my path to feeling whole

as elements connect
my body comes to life,
with the earth underneath
I take off my form to flight

dipping to the ocean
I play amongst the waves,
flying up a cliff-side
I've got adrenaline to save

riding on a tempest
that rips along a storm,
sitting on a headland
watching for the morn

gusting through the bush
the wattle sways with rhyme,
now returning to the earth
is my soul with time

— Seren, Jan 27, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

In the meantime, my precious

In the meantime, my precious daughter, I notice how you have returned to *your style* having negotiated successfully the treacherous rivers of circumnavigation. All my love, Mum "What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others and the world remains and is immortal." Albert Pine
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Not returning just visiting

Not returning just visiting making sure I still got some rhythm left in these bones of mine ... I love my rhyming and I near sing them when I write them and sometimes I need them to 'lift' but tomorrow I have a treat for you ;) its a surprise and its just for you :) definatly NOT a rhymer lol love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
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hippiepoet69

16 years 4 months ago

Thumbs Up

For the most part, I like storms. So I enjoyed your poem. I'm one of the lucky few that have seen "ball lightning". It took me a few seconds to realize what I had seen. Keep em coming. huey
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Hippie

I love storms we've had them all day and yesterday ... I am loving it lol ... I have seen ball lightning in the outback ... its amazing and most people never get to see it ... thanks for the comment and the read I appreciate it ... you take care kind regards love Jayne x x x
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Lonnie

16 years 4 months ago

Thor would be proud!

Very nicely done, Jayne! Great imagery, good flow, and that ever-present touch that is Seren! Loved it!
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear lonnie I love storms I

Dear lonnie I love storms I could sit in them all day and not be fazed lol thanks for the read and the comment its much appreciated I am off to read you and Chrys in a sec take care love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 4 months ago

Dearest Jayne

The style is definitely your very own. Again you have touched my spirit with your beautifully energized images. I am speechless, (almost speechless, anyway, lol) Love, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Big Sis

good to see you how are you doing huni its like I never get to see you lately ... anyway I hope your well I ahve missed you ... take care and much love Jayne-Chloe x x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 4 months ago

You still have it!

Just a little stumble, in the 2nd verse, 2nd line. The [only]. I think you could do without it. Other than that, perfect! Love ya, mountains of hugs, ~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Gee

Of course there would be a small stumble lol ive yet to write one that doesnt need some small tweaaaak lol how are you hun hope your well ... I will be having a read shortly seeing what you all been up to (huggles) love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 4 months ago

Small tweak...

I look forward to seeing what you think of my latest. I am somewhat better than I have been. ~ Love ya, Bug higs, ~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

the tides ever going in and

the tides ever going in and out with us of late isnt it ... my tides out at the moment, cant wait to feel a bit better and just get out of the house a bit more ... anyway I read your newest and I lefteded a comment ... my mother would be so proud of that grammer (not) lol love and hugs Jayne x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Hmmmm after a read Dale I

Hmmmm after a read Dale I think there is only two things I would fix so I will be doing that tomorrow tonight I am absorbed lol I am trying to finish one ive worked on for a little bit love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 4 months ago

Timed Lightening

Lady Jayne I just love thunder and lightning. The power the engery is amazing the patterns in the sky wonderful visuals but also the sound and the vibrations under you feet felt from afar. The storm that follows I just love to be apart of it. I was there sitting there feeling the element charging through me wonderful awesome Electric Blue
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear MagggieeYesssssss thats

Dear Magggiee Yesssssss thats exactly how I feel its like being energised ... the power of a storm is something to behold and we get some doozies here ... you would love it so glad you liked this one I wasnt sure of it ... not having been rhyming for a while lol anyway you take care hun love and hugs Jayne x x x
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 4 months ago

Jayne...

I'm sorry, did you say "this needs editing"? LOL Yeah, right! Well, maybe a little, in the fourth and the last stanzas, but take the advice you just gave me last week: leave it alone! Its most excellent. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

pmsl !! Jim ....

I think my face just cracked from smiling and laughing lol its most excellent ... made me think of bill and teds excellent adventure loved that movie !!! anyway I think I know the two spots you mean because I am going to edit it tomorrow and fix but i think you might be right nothing more need to be done thanks for the laugh muchly appreciated love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Jayne, to fix or not to

Dear Jayne, to fix or not to fix, that is the question! However, let your soul be free to roam itself. Love, Mum "What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others and the world remains and is immortal." Albert Pine
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

that is definately the

that is definately the question though there is one or two small tweaks just tiny things really this one was a pretty smooth write actually I was at home ;) love and hugs Jayne x x x
Victorclaude

Victorclaude

16 years 4 months ago

storms

I love lightning and thunder, especially at sea with a healthy wind a-blowing. Nice work on this piece. Victor Claude
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Victor

By the way my son shares your first name (Jacob Victor)lol his grandpa and greatgrandpa's name ... glad you liked this one ... it was a whim I wrote in the middle of a storm actually love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
LA

Lightman Georg…

16 years 4 months ago

Hello from The Lightman

Just rember deep with in the light there is a world. For us to be, he as resvered a space for all of you and me. You did a very nice job on this one. keep up the great work. Alway remember that poetry and song are the language of the soul.It disapaties the voids by filling up the hole. This is a great read . keep up the work. God bless The Lightman, George Garrett Anasyasia.
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear George

Thank you for your wonderful comment I do appreciate it ... this one was written in the middle of a storm and its not edited yet but i will do a small edit when I come back from a short break ... so glad you enjoyed the read god bless love and hugs Jayne x x x