winter

Welcome, and thank you for your poem, Poet! ~A "What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others and the world remains and is immortal." Albert Pine

Excellent imagery and construction! I, too, say welcome. Always, Cat

the first 4 lines are strong, the 5th line is too long you could shorten it by writng 'they'll' and leaving out 'winter', line 7 'whilest' is an anacronism, use 'while' also 'back' is redundant. I wont analyze the whole poem but you see my point, it could be sharpened up. You need to spend more time on your poems, this has several spelling and punctuation mistakes, read your poems atleast 10 times, and read them aloud, each time you do you will find better ways of saying what you want to say, also don't rush to publish poems, but give them time, leave them for a day or two and then reread them ( this doesn't apply if you think the poem is just right, only if its unfinished) may I suggest you read more modern poets. It is generally considered harder to write in verse forms than in free form, not just technique wise but because of the musicality involved. Either way you seem to have a good ear, I am assuming you're young so all I can suggest is to persevere.

I agree with almost everything Ross said: you have good rhythm for the most part, which makes your poetry a joy to read - or would make it that, if it wasn't for the spelling and grammar problems. Do stick to the tense you picked, and do use spellcheck. Yours, ~Nina