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arja
arja
Jan 26, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Torture

surrounded by darkness i succumb to the cold calling haunting restless my eyes, almost dilated my hands, freezing my feet,soaking wet i smell gasoline and the wire around my throat not fit enough to make the first intense pierce or the deepest cut there's no one to cry for help try to close my eyes but i see your crooked smile your unfinished cigar falling to the ground next thing i know i could see the light...
— arja, Jan 26, 2010

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Region, Country: Makati City, Philippines, PHL

Favorite Poets: Unknown poets who reach out and be heard through crafted words, that are pieces of life..

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arja

arja

16 years 4 months ago

wow, thanks indi!

...i just imagined it in my head, putting myself in a situation most people wouldn't want to be...and i do hope it doesn't happen in reality...again, thank you very much!
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 4 months ago

hello

Torture is an apt title for this poem. The reading of this piece was like watching a wire being slowly coiled tightly. The end came almost like a relief to the unthinkable. Always, Cat
arja

arja

16 years 4 months ago

hi cat!

thanks, im happy people do appreciate my poem...i was afraid something was missing...again, thank you very much!
arja

arja

16 years 4 months ago

personal torture

...just curious Sir Jess, what needs to be implied? would that be the reason behind the torture? :)
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

Like, Jess your poem left

Like, Jess your poem left something to be desired for me: context. You have plenty of *content*...imagery and emotion. Torture in the way you depicted it is lacking, a certain je ne sais quoi. I could go on, but I won't. No one understands. ~A "What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others and the world remains and is immortal." Albert Pine
arja

arja

16 years 4 months ago

context vs content

thank you for taking the time to read the poem...but do enlighten me please... i would like to learn more on what is lacking in this poem... could it be the reason behind the action? or an inspiration that triggered the mind of the torturer? thank you in advance!
AJ

Alcidio Dino Jose

16 years 4 months ago

gGggrrrrRrmmmMm!

Good stuff cat...everything is on point!
arja

arja

16 years 4 months ago

thanks!

..hope to read your poems as well..
xena465

xena465

16 years 4 months ago

All of the above comments..

says it all. This is well written. A horrifing thought to fuse a flame already burning within ones self. Sometimes when feeling that low certain people can do this. So much so is the decline of ones self-worth that at the end it can be less painful to end it than to keeping on living. A sad truth. Rosina xena465
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lyz

16 years 3 months ago

Dramatic

Frightened me, well written though. Love Lyz. XX