Bonitaj

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THE LONG SHADOW OF THE SOUL

La alargada sombra de la alma ( The long shadow of the soul) "I won't care about this as I did before."such is the mantra of detachment,indifference and "no more"Your sacriligious silence has tormented me enough!I didn't expect your indifference to be so tough. If this loss is nonsense joy fallowed, love feigned,why do insidious memories torment my brain -why the mourning -where is the sense?why must this lack-lustre life - be so intense? I don't hurt,I diean intolerable sense of losseach time I cry
Create! be loud, be silent, be proud to penetrateyou with self,your inveterate being.Who am I kidding, are you alive?are you seeing? Things fall apart -there's rot at the centreexcise decay,tie knotsthat none enter.
Your enormity threwa shadow over my terrain,

but I am now free

and on another plain and

I shall never let my soul,be rude to me again!

BjR 26 Jan. 2010

— Bonitaj, Jan 26, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

Critiques

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

“I shall never let my soul

"I shall never let my soul be rude to me again." Says it all. It's such an epiphany! Well done, Boni. Absolutely perfect title... The long shadow of the soul. I'm stumbling over words to tell you how you have touched me with this poem, this title, you. Love, Anna "What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others and the world remains and is immortal." Albert Pine

Bonitaj

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you so much Anna

You, who strike me as such a detached, no make that, tempered soul - have on many occasions touched me with your sensitivity, both in your work and comments - no more so than here! Muchas gracias Bonita

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Boni !!!

I too was struck by the same line as Anna ... an ephipany if ever there was one ... ok sorri boni gotta cut this comment short we got a massive storm headed our way I am getting off the computer before i blow it up lol be back later to finish this love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

Bonitaj

16 years 4 months ago

ps. Thanks Jayne!

Hope I didn't keep you from your Australian day celebrations! ;)

Lonnie

16 years 4 months ago

Forceful and well-penned!

This piece is chocked full of poetic tid-bits that are pleasing to both the eye and ear! A real delight to read and savor!

Nordic cloud

16 years 4 months ago

it was exactly so.

This reminded me of my marriage instead of my soul, it was exactly so. And so it was extra potent to read with such feeling exucuted and you well nigh executed your soul, poor soul. Great stuff Bonni love from Ann of Norway

Bonitaj

16 years 4 months ago

Gee thanks Indi!

As you Americans would say: "That's one hellavu compliment"! Much appreciate the fact that it touched you so! Bonita j

themoonman

16 years 4 months ago

Boni...

I suppose I've read too many poems about the soul, my automatic response is a roll of the eye, but you've shown me how wrong assumptions of cliche can be. I did have one suggestion on a line... why must this lack-luster life - always be so intense why must this lack-luster life be so intense to me it is such a strong line that the break in it detracts, and "always" seemed redundant. great last line Boni... didn't expect it and loved it! Richard

Bonitaj

16 years 4 months ago

Hey Richard!

so good to have you stop by again... it has been a while! Totally agree with your keen eye and dropped the "always"! Just that the word sounds so good in Spanish though ;) Siempre, Siempre! Take care Bonita

kowque

16 years 2 months ago

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when i read this poem i was struck by the force of your words!!! I sometimes read your work and it leaves me dumbstruck with awe and i have little to say, yet youe leave me enflamed! Id love to know how you harness such power? :) kokz