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Untitled (this is my first true freeform, no rhyme scheme to speak of; just how i think on paper)



The heavens opened up and cried, as an angel broke my heart;
pouring down in sheets upon the ground, washing away any memories I could carry home.

Celestial beings slowly sighed, as the gusts blew us apart;
The wind was forceful, melancholy, and made me struggle for stability.

The two forces collided,
and in a storm of lement, regret, and disenchantment; we parted ways forever...
— jtvash, Jan 25, 2010

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Ross Hamilton Hill

Ross Hamilton Hill

16 years 4 months ago

your poem

An angel broke my heart; as the heavens opened up and cried in sheets upon the ground, washing away any memories I could carry home. Celestial beings slowly sighed, as the gusts blew us apart; in a storm of lament, we parted ways forever… sorry i couldnt resist editing this, it has such feeling and musicality.
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jtvash

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you so much! I love

Thank you so much! I love your version, and believe it or not I find it easier to write in a rhyme scheme or lyrical structure. The irony is, to write truly free of any structure, takes work and thought, whereas structure creates a freedom within me to shape words and thought into beautifully tragic images. :)do you like any of my other works?