My Hopes and Dreams has been selected for publication @ Triond.com

My Hopes and Dreams
Has been Selected for publication @ Triond.com

http://authspot.com/poetry/my-hopes-and-dreams/

by
Sinbad the Sailor Man

— Sinbadthesailorman, Jan 24, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S. A. Indiana, Valparaiso, USA

Favorite Poets: Robert Frost, Walt Whitman, Samuel Taylor Coleridge, Carl Sandburg these I have read some And so Many More. I have no Favorite or any that I dislike. Whom I consider to be poets; of course there are many Dark and hateful souls, who would cry out and to I will lend an ear, but some. They just leave a awful taste in my heart that I can not bear to read twice. Let alone as many times I would do normally; as I must.

Critiques

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Sad but heartfelt Sinbadd

Sad but heartfelt Sinbadd ... just a few grammer/spelling issues but they can be sorted in the edits if you want ... and I see Kelzsey has kindly offered to help with that :) love and hugs Jayne

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you both I will be going over it sevral times

I been up for 32hrs now will have to look at it when I am a little sharper if that is possible I can't fall a sleep But I know I need some Donnie/ Sinbad I just had a need to post something and this came to mind so I have to see what I think when I can think I am just doing now on auto pilot

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years 4 months ago

If I couldhave worked my mothers loss in these would be all the

great losses in my life not excluding not seeing my children every day that movie Mrs doubtfire I felt as this carecture did and I still do.Donnie/Sinbad doubtfire tore my heart out

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you Kelsey I could use the rest

The poet vampire: I will weather this storm it shall past, it never lasts longer then a month but, it just gets harder to survie without the connection to the out side world. I need to move south and to a dryer climate, but I can't afford to be far away from my little ones for if ever they shall nee me, I wish to be here for them if I can. Donnie

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you so much Kelsey

As I have said I can read and reread my words, but as i do I some times fixed them in my mind as i read them, hard to explain. It is why I so apreciate this site and those who participate with and in it. I took most of what you suggested to heart, but because of how I read it. Some has stayed the same or I tried to reword it. Stanza 16 She'd miss I was implying that she herself would miss the event, not that she was not there for it, is this the correct way to phrase this? I got some sleep last night, because I think my room mate slipped me a sleeping pill when I wasn't looking because he hasn't turned up yet today I must of been keeping him awake, not easy to live with I know. especially when I get on a whatever these are. Thanks for all the help and I will keep watching and looking at this piece glad you like it enough to help me with it Donnie/Sinbad