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Jan 24, 2010
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the wind blew West
The winds blow West that come to me
with salted scents they hold the sky
with bitter cold they draw the sea
And bid me ask the reason why
At all this love had come to be
There is a bond the heart might share
But I didn't care to dream awake
When all my dreams came to forsake
That you were closer to me there
The wind had showed me what is real
It passed on in a day more fair
while not remembering I stood to feel
The hope that held my heartache there
a drift in wind without a keel
with salted scents they hold the sky
with bitter cold they draw the sea
And bid me ask the reason why
At all this love had come to be
There is a bond the heart might share
But I didn't care to dream awake
When all my dreams came to forsake
That you were closer to me there
The wind had showed me what is real
It passed on in a day more fair
while not remembering I stood to feel
The hope that held my heartache there
a drift in wind without a keel
— Orphani, Jan 24, 2010
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Critiques
Seren
16 years 4 months ago
Sorry Barry I am speachless
Orphani
16 years 4 months ago
Thanks so much Jayne for
Kailashana
16 years 4 months ago
Morning dear, writing early
Orphani
16 years 4 months ago
You are my comfort zone
xena465
16 years 4 months ago
Very touching
Orphani
16 years 4 months ago
Free style is my strong
Ink Dragon
16 years 4 months ago
Barry,
Orphani
16 years 4 months ago
I agree theres some cleaning
Nordic cloud
16 years 4 months ago
A thousand pardons as my pen doth....
Orphani
16 years 4 months ago
I missed you Anne, as way
Sinbadthesailorman
16 years 4 months ago
Lovely
Orphani
16 years 4 months ago
I’m doing this as a
Sinbadthesailorman
16 years 4 months ago
I was thrown off by the freeform selection I forget others are
Kailashana
16 years 4 months ago
My version dearest:It was
Orphani
16 years 4 months ago
I plan to give your ides
Sinbadthesailorman
16 years 4 months ago
To the last line I care not as to the other corrections they
Orphani
16 years 4 months ago
I agree with you all the way
Sinbadthesailorman
16 years 4 months ago
Yes this works really well, this new line in the last stanza
Orphani
16 years 4 months ago
This is an exploratory poem
Sinbadthesailorman
16 years 4 months ago
Yeah steal implies it was taken away
DawningDaytripper
16 years 4 months ago
ababa abba ababaI liked your
Orphani
16 years 4 months ago
I really like your engaging
Nordic cloud
16 years 4 months ago
Your winds here keep blowing
Orphani
16 years 4 months ago
I’ll put a fresh fish on
Electric Blue
16 years 4 months ago
The wind blue West
Orphani
16 years 4 months ago
I think there are two sides
Nordic cloud
16 years 4 months ago
You communicate
Lunegirl
16 years 4 months ago
Dear BarryI cannot yet