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Put the razor away

 The cheat insists the game was fair
Right after you find that you've lost the game
And paid on the bet you didn't know you'd made.
You've lost your hold on the smallest share
Of joy, you stagger under a load of blame
That he won't own, for a soiled maid.

Now be warmed by angry fire
And furious edged and spiteful dreams
Imagine flows of his guilty blood
To stand in place of your real desire
To see his life pour out in streams
Drowning your pain in a crimson flood.

Only stay from murder tonight
And give yourself some time to heal.
These wounds are new and terrible
In your new-found knowing sight,
But the best use for your youthful steel
Is to keep to life---it's bearable.

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lyz

16 years 3 months ago

hey mate

A great read. What is that old saying? Cheats never prosper? I think that is it. Any way, I enjoyed this poem and I am off to check out more from you. Welcome to the site. Love Lyz. XX
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poewriter58

16 years 3 months ago

Welcome Back

It is good to see you once again. I would suggest adding one more line the "it's bearable" ends the poem to abruptly Chrys
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Skumpfsklub

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks. It IS abrupt---

But I put the formal straitjacket on before I started writing. The form was prescribed, an arbitrary box to fill---the poem is really only the product of an exercise. The subject matter came of my having read perhaps one or two too many abandoned-girl poems. If I'd prescribed an open-ended formal scheme, e.g., Elizabethan quatrains, I'd be able to fix it. It seems abrupt to me, too.
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Skumpfsklub

16 years 3 months ago

The drumbeat slowed from the

The drumbeat slowed from the man-killing race tempo to the deeply ominous note of fourteen strokes to the minute: ramming speed. The oarsmen were VERY precise, and entirely dependent on the time sense of the drummer. Too fast, and the beak would foul; too slow, and the beak would not pierce the timbers of the enemy galley---and they would be boarded with most of the armed freemen of the crew still on the oardeck. They would die.
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Skumpfsklub

16 years 3 months ago

Why write another faux

Why write another faux comment, you ask? Because the poems I'm doin' that for today have not been visited a hundred times yet---and their 'visits' include a substantial number of 'visits' engendered by my returns to the pieces, and some spurious 'visits' that appear to be artifacts of bugs in the program. So, get used it: I keep recommenting until I feel that the poem has had enough exposure to lend value to the numbers.