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Seren
Seren
Jan 23, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

preparing for war

I asked him to drape me
in saffron robes
embossed with his magic,

he employed the staff of truth
and strobed my sight against time

I arose from sleep a maiden
and now,
return to slumber a warrior,
my flanks were beaten in the fray
and my sword lost,
but as blood trickled down my forehead
fear brought a gift from the ancients

~~~

I've cut my hair
and shaved my head,

a mongol
armored for war
my mouth tangs 
incessantly

and I can taste blood


— Seren, Jan 23, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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M

Millage

16 years 4 months ago

JC

I really enjoyed this one Hun. I found your word usage very descriptive. Superb stuff. Much love Millage x
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Mile man

What a pleasant surprise long time no speak eh lol hahah glad you enjoyed it hun love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x x
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 4 months ago

Dear dramatic Jayne

Wow and now I too have tasted blood, you conjured up the scene and poured it for me to drink, unless I am specially vulnerable just today! I tasted it in your so dramaticaly descripitive poem. Epic stuff this:- "I arose from sleep a maiden and now, return to slumber a warrior, my flanks where beaten in the fray and my sword lost, but as blood trickled down my forehead fear brought a gift from the ancients" My horse my horse, oh wow you fair paint the picture on the inner surface of the brain.
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Ann

I dont know where this one came from to be honest lol I wrote it on the train coming home the other night and then finished it last night ... and it was other warrior poems that I had in mind but I dont think this one quite hit the mark lol anyway thanks for the read I am glad you got where I was intimating love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

16 years 4 months ago

WOW that’s amazing Jayne.

WOW that's amazing Jayne. Some title suggestions eh? "Warrior in Saffron Robes" is the best I can come up with. BTW where=were in the line "flanks where beaten". Awesome one though!!! Love it. Peace
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Katie

So glad you liked this one and I missed 'were' three times ... glad you liked it darlin ... (hugs) hope all is going well with the new place love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Q

Quillsvein1

16 years 4 months ago

Very evocative

of a "warrior's state of mind", and how. I can taste the proverbial blood dripping from your ferocious syntax! lol. You seem a little too gentle to me though to be wielding it all around like Spartacus. Great job Seren
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear GB

I hate to tell you but I can be fiesty sometimes lol I appreciate you having a read of this one, I had to laugh at the spartacus reference lol thank you for the smile love and hugs Jayne x x x
L

lyz

16 years 4 months ago

Got a lotta fight

in ya still, Mongol warrior woman. A really good poem with a couple of meanings, I read, but I will stick to one. A strong play with words, I love it. Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear One

Well I have mongol blood so i thought it was apt lol thanks for the read and this old dog still has plenty of fight left in me lol love you huni talk soon love and hugs Jayne x x x x
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 4 months ago

Whew Jayne!

I can feel that heady rush, having tasted that self-same blood! As the English would say: Bloody Brilliant! Boni
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Boni !! bloody good to see

Boni !! bloody good to see you as us aussies say lol thanks for the read i am glad you liked this one ,.. I knew it wouldnt be to everyones 'taste' but it came from nowhere and demanded to be writen love and big hugs Jayne x x x