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Jan 22, 2010
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Onus
Dis-membered corpses leaking blood
into sodden, Asian mud
beside a gently flowing stream
cause my sleeping mind to scream
Huey choppers sliding by
in a dismal, rainy sky
spitting death at those below
take me where I should not go
Rooms of aging, shattered men
blending pain of now and then
dying, even as they share
the varied tales that brought them there
All of this creates a hole
wherein once dwelt a thriving soul
and there it festers day by day
slowly eating life away
but do not mourn or weep for me
for i am but a dream you see
save your prayers for soldiers now
who die for those who don't know how
and love the ones who do return
with limbs all torn and hearts that burn
give them honor that is due
for they have given much for you
C. Lon R. Bruso
into sodden, Asian mud
beside a gently flowing stream
cause my sleeping mind to scream
Huey choppers sliding by
in a dismal, rainy sky
spitting death at those below
take me where I should not go
Rooms of aging, shattered men
blending pain of now and then
dying, even as they share
the varied tales that brought them there
All of this creates a hole
wherein once dwelt a thriving soul
and there it festers day by day
slowly eating life away
but do not mourn or weep for me
for i am but a dream you see
save your prayers for soldiers now
who die for those who don't know how
and love the ones who do return
with limbs all torn and hearts that burn
give them honor that is due
for they have given much for you
C. Lon R. Bruso
— Lonnie, Jan 22, 2010
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Lonnie
16 years 4 months ago
Thanks, Indi
poewriter58
16 years 4 months ago
Lon
Lonnie
16 years 4 months ago
Thank you, Dearest!
Seren
16 years 4 months ago
I am sorry your write has
Lonnie
16 years 4 months ago
Thank you, Jayne!
Seren
16 years 4 months ago
Lonnie
Kailashana
16 years 4 months ago
(((((Lonnie))))) To all
Lonnie
16 years 4 months ago
Thanks again, Anna!
weirdelf
16 years 4 months ago
Powerful, honest, insightful write, my friend.
Lonnie
16 years 4 months ago
I'll try to explain myself!
weirdelf
16 years 4 months ago
ok, I see why you used "you see"
ovi2wise
16 years 4 months ago
WOAH!
Annie-Rae
16 years 4 months ago
OMG
Lonnie
16 years 4 months ago
Thank you so much!