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Futures of The Mind

Futures of the mind

 

Exploding meteors a hundred thousand miles away,
not one person injured the guns are staying silent
Wonderful new planets welcomed into our new day,
angry words abandoned by men that could be violent

Tired eyes but I feel good,
as I see the words develop
Clock now ticks against me,
as the story does envelope

Sometimes writing all night long,
a verse a poem a song, a sentence
who would stop this beautiful feeling,
Is it my sanity, my mind it threatens

If I told you where my mind could drift,
when I search for ever more to writ
I’m sure that your soul would lift,
as you flew with my friend flibbertigibbet

To rise onto another wave,
and carry the hedgerow high
To plunder all that you crave,
and still belief enough to fly

        gloom
        |||||||||||

Alas our feet is on this earth,
not a bad thing I’ll admit
So it has been since my birth,
that we just have to live with it

Now we learn another lesson,
keenly that is taken to the heart
Wait, what is this I’ve stumbled on,
more adventures of my mind,
                                                       and so I must depart.      Byeeee

— Roscoe Lane, Jan 22, 2010

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Region, Country: Scotland, Ayrshire land of Burns.., GBR

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Critiques

Rett

Rett

16 years 4 months ago

Interesting

A few spelling errors, a bit of pointlessness, but overall, well crafted. I like the patterns, though for me, content is lacking. Your vocabulary is good and I think you can craft a much better poem. Respectfully, Rett: “Anyone who sacrifices liberty for security deserves neither.” Benjamin Franklin
Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you

Please point out spelling errors as i can only find one, and that was meant. The poem was supposed to be about someone writing through the night, and getting sleepy. So i allowed the drift so to speak, this may account for the pointlessness. Thank you anyway as it's always gould to get comments. Your freind, Roscoe.