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Sparks I Didn't Miss

When I reached the foaming edge
of shoreline chased
by surge of distant storm
and waning traces of old night
I wondered which
of all the gods I know and love
had placed my footsteps
so carefully upon
the turn and twist
of winding paths
on high brown moors
by tumbling crisp cold river
downwards to forgotten beach
for my greeting of the dawn

I asked myself the reason
for this new excursion
as the rim of day broke crimson
out across the swell
of white-capped winter ocean
for I had never been
along that path before
I could find no answer
to the question of my doubt
yet when I turned my gaze
toward the sacred North
upon the curve of merging
where ocean met the land
I found a gleam of orange stars
embers glowing  bright in rising sun
mingled with dark voids of blackness
deeper than the moonless night
amongst the grey-stained sands

I wandered lonely miles
through taste of endless sea
rising on cold wind
following those glints
of shining warmth
and glowing sunless dark
picking out the best

here they lie so sweetly now
long years after doubt
the warmth of amber
polished teardrops of translucency
carved with stars  orange-golden
frozen flames in grip
of silver dragon pendant's claws
on a braid of chain so sleek and fine
studded with round orbs
of darkest glittering jet
blood in moonlight
throwing back the candlelight
from their resting place
nestled deep between
the curves of your dark breasts
they click a subtle dance
when you turn closer in my arms
and I laugh with simple joy
at my old lack of Faith
the brimming strength of Now
and the sparks I didn't miss









— Race_9togo, Jan 22, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Earth Vicinity (within a five light-year radius), ZZC

Favorite Poets: John Donne, T.S. Eliot, Serendipity, Emily Dickenson, Kailashana, Charles Bukowski, Kabir, Rett, Dalton, W. B. Yeats, William Blake, Rainer Maria Rilke, and many other Neopoet poets; Neopoet has heavily influenced my poetry and my ability to write it well.

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raskin

16 years 4 months ago

Great picture

You captured well the northern seas. I grew up on one and this brought to my mind the roiling grey, turbulent foaming water. The wind, the rising sun, I enjoyed how you ended this one, made it a great story. raskin
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 4 months ago

Thanks Raskin

25 years its been since last I saw the sea, and still I cannot forget. Glad you enjoyed this. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
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Mohammad Yamin Iraqi

16 years 4 months ago

Sparks I didn't Miss

An enchanting poem -good flow and use of metaphors -very absorbing. I like your style and choice of words. -Mohammad
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 4 months ago

Thanks Mohammed

Its good to see you again, I'm glad that you enjoyed my effort so much. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
Ross Hamilton Hill

Ross Hamilton Hill

16 years 4 months ago

your poem

I thought this was very good, the imagery, the rhythm, the dedication to your muse. one quibble "I wandered lonely' is too like wordsworth's poem " I wandered lonely as a cloud' maybe this was unconscious, but apart from that great work. made my day.
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 4 months ago

Thanks Ross

Glad you enjoyed it. It did not occur to me that that particular line was like Wordsworth's or anyone else's, but since it's meaning in the context of the line is very different, I think I'll leave it as is. Thanks again Ross. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Jim

In wonder at you not having seen the ocean in 25yrs ... dont know that i could go twelve was brought up on the pacific ocean ... but I can see by your poem she made an impression well writen ... love and hugs Jayne x x x
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 4 months ago

Thanks Jayne.

I think I might remedy my long exile from Mother Ocean this fall, and hit the Eastern Seaboard! Glad you enjoyed this one. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
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Ink Dragon

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Jim,

I've been meaning to comment on this one for ages, as I really enjoyed reading it. It has great rhythm and I love the imagery. My fav lines: I wandered lonely miles through taste of endless sea rising on cold wind following those glints of shining warmth and glowing sunless dark picking out the best Yours, ~Nina
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks Nina

Its good to hear from you. I enjoyed writing this one, it all just came together late one night. Usually, I start with an idea, and it develops, but this one just flowed right out of my pen. I did try Ross's suggestion of changing the "lonely miles" line, but I changed it back because I like it better this way, it flows much better. I suppose I was justified in doing so, considering your favorite lines. I am glad that you enjoyed my poem so much, and thanks you again Nina. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race