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SATIN PILLOW

Satin pillow

Not empty words on satin pillows

nor clouds of smoke among the billows

those calligraphic turns of phrase

do choke my heart to win its praise 

for casting out my love, 

dashing down the dove

shot by sense's undefined and cruel

while we loved and had such fire, the fuel

for chariots of flames engrossed

when fidelity lay uppermost

in my mind's thoughts

and now the wheels of feelings nought

your spirit dampened, dulled and dashed

as when you slashed across my moat

into the inner sanctuary 

the one, that now is smote.

 

Oh betrayal is a foul word

with terror in its throat

your silvered voice absurd

when listened to by rote,

such repetition breathed

such false derision now bereaved 

I lie now contemplating dreams

that are now suddenly bequeathed

by chance, your love now wreathed. 


 

  



— Nordic cloud, Jan 19, 2010

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Region, Country: Oslo and Flatdal, Norway., NOR

Favorite Poets: Too daunting this.

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Geezer

Geezer

16 years 4 months ago

Satin Pillows...

Oh, my Queen. What dasterly villian has broken your heart? I will chase him to the ends of the earth to make him pay! Your sobs have called me from my quests, to do battle for your honor. I will cut out his silver tongue, and give it to Killer to cook and make into dog food. Nay, he would not eat so foul a thing, even though his taste do run that way. Your heartfelt cry, is a thing of beauty to my ears. So magical your words, to describe so vicious an assault on your love. Precious are they, and truly worthy of someone who will appreciate them. Your faithful knight, Sir Gee
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 4 months ago

My faithful Knight, dear Sir Gee,

Must answer my faithful Knight, dear Sir Gee, it is not someone who has broken my heart, maybe in another manner made me feel this way, but also an idea of what it would feel like, so no need to worry, but thank you for your concern, that is a warm heart you have my Geezer. Thank you too for appreciating them and being moved by them, they are usually written with that intent aren't they, love poems, one wrings them out of the heart like an old familiar rag, one that goes through many tearings and other wear during a lifetime and this gives them immediacy of expression. Oh my Valiant Knight at arms, you are indeed a man of true devotion to your queen, she appreciates it and sends you a new head dress with a plume for the writing of your poetry adorning its crown, ever ready for use even on the battlefields of Neopoet's land. I hope I can repay you for your steadfast devotion. We give you a trumpet blast of honour, listen...can you hear it? Wonderful pomp and circumstance stuff that what!!!!! Long may you live. Your Queen with her love Ann of the Nordic Sagas. (Well my aunt Jean Isobel Young, was responsible for translating them)
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 4 months ago

Your faithful knight says...

Boy, it is a good thing the no one has broken your heart, my Queen! I would make them pay dearly for the transgression! The new headress is most welcome, and I will make good use of it. Thank you for the fanfare also! 'Tis french horns is it not? They inspire a man to be noble. They have a lonely, but uplifting sound, making one want to do great deeds. I hear them, yes! Loudly, as though just over the next hill. Your Aunt Jean, was the translator? I can only imagine what a thrill to do this great service for the world. To be the one who reads the words of men of valor and courage from so long ago! Amazing! To my Queen of the Nordic Sagas then! ~ love and hugs, ~ Sir Gee
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Ann of Norway:

Ah, the pangs of unrequitted love, written in exquisite phrases, exuding the pain, feeling and remembering times gone by. Excellent, my good friend, great words, great poem. Sincerely, Hugo
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you too Hugo

We two like love poems do we not? They are closest to the human state is it not; when I reread his i feel the colourings of an old fashioned turn of phrase and soon will perhaps seem obsolete, my hair from brown to gey to white, but not just yet. Love Ann
L

lyz

16 years 4 months ago

All said before me

plus my extra two bobs worth. My Dear Ann, this is deep. I give you full marks on a write well written, may your satin pillow keep your dreams safe. Love and best wishes I send to you, take care lovely one. love Lyz. XX
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Idlemindwondering

16 years 4 months ago

dear Ann

I am just now getting back too you; I have been quite ill these past days. I read, and am brought back to my own shadows of love's illusions where I have been the audience, racked with pain; and the magician on shame's stage. Desire is a two sided sword that leaves us to believe illusions yet holds a soothing hand that caresses the wounds of love with tomorrow's mirror. How harsh the turns of life wound be without such hope, without the chance that love is real, somewhere... ken
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 4 months ago

caresses the wounds of love with tomorrow’s mirror.

"Desire is a two sided sword that leaves us to believe illusions yet holds a soothing hand that caresses the wounds of love with tomorrow’s mirror. " Oh wow this is great stuff oh Idle mind wondering! I am mortified that you should be in pain, that is not good, I hope that it has all blown away and is never coming back; tomorrows mirror, that is so, so special a way of expressing this, beautifully put Ken. Its fascinatingly surreal image in my mind is teasing me to see behind the mirror. I believe that love is real if the one loving makes it real, it is a giving before anything else and whether it is reciprocated or not, it is as real as it gets when felt with one's whole being. The giving is the love, and it is so wonderful that it overwhelms any negativity, becoming pure positive thinking and vanquishes all else. Well that's what I think!! My love and hope that you will stay well for a very long time Ken, from Ann of Norway.
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Ann

Its all been said with Panache before me dear one ... bravo ;) love and biggest hugs Jayne x x x
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 4 months ago

And here is your voice and a welcome one

And here is your voice and a welcome one as aye, it is lovely to hear from your dear Jayne. Thank you for enjoying my poem and for being so positive about it too, sure you can't find any faults or suggestions for bettering it? I am always open for criticisms. Love to you and all your happy cooking family, long may you all live too.( Just done my answer to Sir Gee!) Ann.X
Seren

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

I am going to have a shower

I am going to have a shower shortly but I will come back and have a look at your poem as requested but I cannot guarantee i will find fault but I will see what I can do to help lol I am a little free on time at the moment no kids at home i am missing them they are away at their dads lol I know he needs to see them too but I still miss them big sook I am lol love to you dear one Jayne-Chloe x x x
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 4 months ago

Meloncholic filters of love residue...

Ah Ann, I come to your pages once again and I am drawn in by the somehow sweet melancholic filters of loves residue on the air. This has me panging and twanging my heart strings which you have plucked everso cleverly with such flowing words that have obviously been penned with the blood pumped out of your heart. You permiate the page with a buffed cloud of love floating pink tinged in the air and surrounds your head and fills your mind with love tinged in saddness and I hope that this is not about you my friend, hope someone hasn't repelled your ever expansive and loving heart! Very well written Ann with such tender flow! Dale :)
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 4 months ago

Oh SUCH a lovely comment from you dear Dale

Oh SUCH a lovely comment from you dear Dale, wow you have penned a cloud of pink that surely will ever soothe me should I find myself on the brink of this kind of trouble. No, not exactly, I have been in this situation but many blue moons ago and am happy as I am. Thank you for your sensitive concern, I love your 'tree' so full of intangibility, moonlit and magic, I have seen its maker. Thank you again Dale with my pink cloud of love to send you to sleep tonight as I must away to my bed, good night from Ann.
xena465

xena465

16 years 4 months ago

Hi Ann, I'ts xena your new pal

It's hard to choose from so many wonderful poems, however, I chose this one because of your response to the comments. I too thought your heart had been broken with this read, a lady of such passion can't be that strong. Or pehaps your strength and passion mended your heart so much so that it's completely whole once more. That's my guess. From: yer bonnie wee lass fae Glesga (slang interpretation of the true sentence) I'm guessing you'll understand the slang. Rosina
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 4 months ago

I feel I have lost

I feel I have lost something, I felt I had lost something, I did loose something and that hurts so much when one does doesn't' it? One is lamed for a while and cannot breath properly, the sensations of the loss weigh heavily, what ever the other part may mean or say, and this sense of loss haunts us and stays with us for ever like a floating thought in the air, and is reinforced at each and every jog of the memory of it, in the same way as your sad feelings still, at the loss of your sister and your cat. Estrangement is hard and never really leaves us however hard we try to cover it up. But life goes on and we have to sing our song as best we can in spite of its disappointments, we must look on the bright side and see the pettiness of our egoism too sometimes. Love from egoistic Ann. From another bonnie wee las fea Noroway, "To Noroway , to Noroway, to Noroway o'er the foam" And I did go there, here. I love Norway and when I love I do whole heartedly. /www.tnellen.com/cybereng/poetry/poems/the_ballad_of_sir_patrick_spens.html Love to you Rosina from Ann
xena465

xena465

16 years 4 months ago

Your strength

is infectious and insipiring to me. 10 days before Christmas my wee pet rat Xena was put to sleep due to re-occurring Breast Cancer. She was 3 years old and my baby. Pet rats only live 2/2 & a half years so she lived to be and old lady. I missed her so much I had to buy another pet rat two weeks later, Zak 10 weeks old. He fills part of the hole she left in my heart. I swore I wouldn't get another pet, even a gold fish, but living completely alone, I couldn't do it. Xena was a house rat, no cage. She slept beside me in bed and for those two weeks I kept touching the empty place beside me and cried myself to sleep. Now when I hear the patter of Zak's feet run across my floor, I'm reminded of the pleasure it gave me when I had Xena and this is good. Rosina