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same knot,different game

the same knot, a different game.


I am waiting
to find peace
he is waiting to die

(as a somatic affliction
doggedly gnaws away
at his consciousness)

at opposite ends of the house
we sit upon the same knot.

i hear voices
reverberate within my knot
my own mostly,
each in a different tone
each in a different moment
whispers,
screams and audible sighs.
I suspect he hears the same:
an affable induction perhaps,
to the cessation of his life
something proper…
the formality of death is inescapable
it clings to the sound
of mandolins and soft keys.

his back faces the door
and his chest
is embraced by a blank wall.
he sits on the same place
on the bed, everyday.
my grandfather is waiting
to die
yet time has no place
in this composition
so I wonder,
could it be, time has
surreptitiously slunk away?

HIDE AND SEEK.
death seeks
time hides,
camouflaged inside his own
imperceptible skin,
and my grandfather waits
for death to find him, instead,
whilst pacified
by mandolins and soft keys.

— kowque, Jan 18, 2010

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

Bow. So much beauty and

Bow. So much beauty and eloquence, elegant thoughts in wonderfully paced words here I don't know where to start except to say thank you for sharing. ~A
kowque

kowque

16 years 4 months ago

helo you....

im glad u liked it... thank you for your words kokz
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 4 months ago

wow kiddo!

You're growing up real fast! At least your poetry is ;) Your metaphors are so deep I can hardly bring them up for light of day viz, to the cessation of his life something proper… the formality of death is inescapable it clings to the sound of mandolins and soft keys. Doleful sounding mandolins? keys - musical or bunches? What I'm having difficulty with is "his chest is embraced by a blank wall" not good this one! Walls have no roundness with which to embrace - they are not all encompassing - the are too rigid to have 'rounded' arms... lol! Love your work sista! Bonita j
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anonymous1

16 years 4 months ago

maybe...

...his chest is as you describe a wall and so, it is a perfect fit. interesting is this definition from m-w.com for somatic: of or relating to the wall of the body.
loved

loved

16 years 2 months ago

EXCELLENT

SUCH LOVELY WORDS CAN EMANATE FROM MINDS WHICH EXCELL EVERY DAY AND PROPEL MANKIND TO LEAD A NEWER WAY WHICH WE CALL IT AS EVOLUTION THATS JUST BY THE WAY LOVED