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The promised nite

The promised Night

 

It will be a longer one,

 

If tonight is that night

 

For which you have waited

 

All those nights

 

Till tonight.

 

 

So till she comes

 

On the promised nite

 

Read this one tonight.

 

 

 

Do You Read Me

 
Here I’ve learnt

Read me twice

 

I’ll read you once

 

My first 10 poems

 

None read.

 

Now they all read

 

What I post at once

 

many  poems in all

 

Adding more and more,

 

Of your own self

 

You have to be sure

 

What you want more?

 

Cents or folks

 

Both sexes to allure

 

Read me

 

More and more

— loved, Jan 15, 2010

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magics02

16 years 4 months ago

Allure

I wear a cologne called allure by channel and it is as sweet as your words here. I really like this one. Peace Magics02
loved

loved

16 years 4 months ago

loved

thank you very much friend From the Loved one Love is all I ask God has been kind to me For I have found lovers Lovely lovers like thee. My love is pure and sweet When we, if ever do meet Twill be a real treat Till then my love is all That you can relish and eat. Love is all in my heart Of loved ones alone I am an inseparable part. If you love me God shall love thee And when it’s me I will be also be Loved by you for free.
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 4 months ago

nice read

I think you way over-use the spaces between lines, makes it read like a sloth on valium. Content wise I get the feeling you were intending to use a metaphor of lovers reading each other like poems but it changed into a comment about your poems being read and commented on at Neopoet. If you are dis-satisfied with feedback here, the first thing to look at is your feedback to others and your poems themselves. Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible
loved

loved

16 years 4 months ago

message

your intended message is unclear kindly clarify thanks May I have your kind views on this artcle please thanks Sex American style Premarital The numbers of people, who have read your article, simply justify that only sex sells and now a word about sex. Throughout the history of humanity even when USA/CANADA were not born sex pre, post and multi sexual partners, during married life Was the order of a higher society? Kings Queens and so on rich people indulged in a variety of sexual activities. Kings and Queens then reigned supreme. Today we all are king and queen sized human beings, in all walks of life .So we have premarital sex and when one gets AIDS /HIV, none can blame the other spouse as we all are part of the huge sexual game. Even in animals sex is contained between groups, where as in human race alone this trait has been freely expanded. Some grandmothers in earlier years never experienced an orgasm. Today no girl would marry unless you assure her orgasm first, orally, manually or by finger manipulation. The in /out of the penis is basically for male ejaculation, as the penis rarely rubs the clitoris in various sexual positions. Doctors and Porno-guys simply exploit sex. So have sex ,pre or post, but stick to a safe kind of people, but then no one can say who is safe, no not even your own hubby/wife . So have premarital AIDS /HIV test and if both of you are compatible sexually, of course having tested mental compatibility first, then you are entitled to premarital sex ,to be continued into an extended sexual partnership, marriage not withstanding ,or for as long as you two only cohabit regularly and that too by taking safety measures to avoid STD’s etc
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 4 months ago

I think you way over-use the

I think you way over-use the spaces between lines that's clear. the first 9 lines talk about a lover with the 9th referring to a poem that's clear the remaining 17 lines seem to be a muddle between reading or being read by your lover or having your poems read on Neopoet. That is what is unclear to me. It also feels grasping and selfish. The article is too poorly written to comment on. Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible
loved

loved

16 years 4 months ago

thanks

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