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Praise The Lord, and Pass The Mustard
A sad thought arose
as I genuflected with a cup of Black Forest:
If you were to throw words into a bucket
and dump them over a railing
let them scatter amidst the wind
and have a blind man put together
strings of fallen random fragments
his end product would make more sense
than our politicians
edit 5/4/10: Total overhaul. Removed the three-line-per-stanza formatting, as it was unnecessary. "Dabbled with a comparison" didn't really make much sense, so ditched that, too. I figured the blind man putting together a string of words from the pieces in the bucket was a more powerful image, and really drove the point home.
And for those asking about the title: When I first looked back, I couldn't remember why I had chosen it.... well, I remembered - it's designed to highlight random words thrown together. Knew there was a reason for it!
Critiques
poewriter58
16 years 4 months ago
Jess
orgami
16 years 4 months ago
I like this muchly
weirdelf
16 years 4 months ago
Loved this! Till the last line
weirdelf
16 years 4 months ago
great title too
orgami
16 years 4 months ago
Again
Dalton
16 years 1 month ago
the only criticism is that
Dalton
16 years 1 month ago
didn’t reall understand
infinite_dwarf
16 years 1 month ago
John
Kailashana
16 years 1 month ago
Sorry I missed this then and
Candlewitch
16 years 1 month ago
Dear Jess-Dwarf
infinite_dwarf
16 years 1 month ago
Cat
Candlewitch
16 years 1 month ago
:)