arja

Jan 15, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Love Lost

thoughts of youstill linger..it’s beentoo longthosehappy daysof sweet smiles& careless hugs…meant nothingbut thenI waswrong…where was I?when you said,“I love you”where were you?when I finally…it's too late,our love…
…lost!

— arja, Jan 15, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Makati City, Philippines, PHL

Favorite Poets: Unknown poets who reach out and be heard through crafted words, that are pieces of life..

Critiques

lyz

16 years 4 months ago

Very good

I faltered 3rd last line, like as if a word were missing, but apart from that, flowed well and I enjoyed all. Love Lyz, Xx

arja

16 years 4 months ago

This was actually the original poem...

A Love Lost Its been Almost half a decade And the thought of you Still haunts me The questions Of what might have been Lingers in my mind Like wine Aged by time… Those happy days Sweet smiles And careless hugs They meant Nothing to me But pure friendship Thats what I thought But I was wrong Now I know… I find myself In deep thought Where was I When you said I love you And where were you When I felt the urge To tell you Likewise… Time has passed by I guess Its too late To find you Only to be disillusioned Of something That has long gone Withered And lost… Our eyes Not to meet Our hands Not to entertwine Our love Not meant to be Our hearts Not to be as one we were Not destined at all… ...but I don't know why I decided to shorten it, last night...

lyz

16 years 4 months ago

Beautiful

Both are beautiful, you can go back and edit. It is up to you, as I said, I do like both reads. The original is always the best though, so, if you decide to change anything, I will be back for another read. Love Lyz. XX

arja

16 years 4 months ago

Thanks!

...i kinda like the short one...but i was also thinking about Lyz comment, about the 3rd last line...i was thinking of putting the word "now" or just a comma (,)... any suggestion?

Luscious Lips

16 years 4 months ago

love is lost...

...but not dead! i like the long version! It is sad to go through life with regrets of what might have been, should have been, but if it weren't meant to be in this lifetime, then what's the lesson learned? Anyways...I like your poem!! LL

arja

16 years 4 months ago

lesson learned...

...sorry it took me so long to reply... i guess we have our own preferences with the poem, long or short...i just felt editing it... as to the question: "what's the lesson learned?"...it is learning to accept things, even when it doesn't turn out the way we expect it to be...realizing that there's something more compelling that just one love, lost in this lifetime...our journey in life is ever growing & searching it does not end with a broken heart...

arja

16 years 4 months ago

Exactly!

...life is not just happiness! there will always be challenges, difficulties and struggles through out our journey; but i do believe that these things happen not just for a reason, but for us to be molded as individuals with a strong foundation built with Faith, Hope and Love...

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

The hesitiation

Ann of Norway "thoughts of you still lingers.." .........either the S cut off thoughts or off linger ! We love, we walk, we fall, we stand and all the while we learn to understand. Love Ann

arja

16 years 3 months ago

..Thank you Ms Ann of

..Thank you Ms Ann of Norway! ..I totally agree :) again Thank you!

raskin

16 years 3 months ago

Nice flow, love and longing

Nice flow, love and longing always make for good poetry. Original is very good as well but seems personal. Glad to read this it was lovely. Raskin

arja

16 years 2 months ago

oh dear raskin, my

oh dear raskin, my apologies for not replying to your comment.. I Thank You very much for having visited and commented to this piece (of me). It is indeed personal, but I've been over the guy (i think, sometimes..LOL)! I do hope you'd come and visit again... ;)

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Arja

Siggggh been there done that ... its all been said before me with much more panache love and hugs Jayne-Chloe

arja

16 years 2 months ago

..oh love and hugs to you

..oh love and hugs to you too Ms. Jayne-Chloe! ;)