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jove
jove
Jan 14, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Dragons' Love Song

 I would fly a dragons' sky,
or swing upon its beard. 
I would catch a dragons' eye,
or tweak a dragons' ear.

 I'd reflect its heated breath, 
or dodge its spells' allure.
I'd escape most certain death, 
Yes my soul would endure.  

I could treasure hunt its lair,
or offer games of wit.
Pose a riddle, take a dare,
then rub its nose in it .

I could breach its scaly hide,
no fears of teeth nor claws. 
To teach its fiery heart inside, 
to champion your cause.  

I would swim a dragons' sea, 
or dance upon it's eye.
I would capture it for thee, 
and chop it down to size.  

If  placed  in a magic jar, 
would you then set it free?
If you knew my hearts desire,
You'd do the same for me?  

I would catch one every day,  
clear the seas and skies. 
I would fill a million jars,
with lovelorn dragonflies.

As your captured hearts take wing, 
when you set each one free. 
They in turn would sweetly sing, 
our song of love to thee.  


By Jove !    
— jove, Jan 14, 2010

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Region, Country: British Columbia, CAN

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DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 4 months ago

Well that was a damn Good

Well that was a damn Good story Jove. I loved your story of a dragon tale, as a love story. Flow was good. But I don't think your last verse flows the same. It's a little long for your flow. Just an opinion of coarse. And as your loving hearts take wing, as you set each one free. In turn to you, each one would sing, of the love we have for thee. My loving heart takes wing, as you set each one free. Your prasies they would sing of our love meant to be I tried to maintain meaning, but with the switch of it being you being the one with the heart taking wing. I think I like it. But it is only a suggestion. Feel free to take what you need. And leave the rest. And although a Grand ole' tale, Your double usage of Thee didn't feel right. Again only an opinion. Which is why I switched your last thee, the first was poetic, the second implied a style. And your double usage of million in the same stanza didn't feel right either. So in my suggestion is to use commanly accepted substitute that implys that it may even be more. More the merrier when you get to a million right? Kajillion and Bajillion. No acctual value but means alot, possibly even more than a million. Perfectly acceptable for a tale. Have I mentioned, its all just my opinion. I shall look to read more. I am sure to like it. Julie D.D.