Orphaness (Rise of DeMona)

Though born into light
Still the darkness found her
Mortal father from a tainted love affair
Left them alone, in despair

Mortified mother from another world
Had to save herself
Left her baby girlOut in the cold

Fighting for survival
Lost inside castle walls
She was raised to answer the call
Vengence and Rage
Mixed with love and hate
How could an innocent child
Be dealt this fate?

Spiteful woman
With fangs of poison
Sunk deep into his neck
Claws of fire
Raking down his back

Daddy dearest
Ashamed of what he created
Time to pay for all the years
She was slighted

Mother next
If only she could be found
Where is that stupid bitch
The one who left her baby
Out in the cold

And so she stalks the night
Looking for victims
To feed her tortured quest
To relieve her from the past

The past is our present
The present is our future
One way or the other
It comes back to bite you

— hardcorechick28, Jan 13, 2010

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DloganB

16 years 4 months ago

Great Stuff

My favorite part Vengence and Rage Mixed with love and hate How could an innocent child Be dealt this fate? Love the Vampness

hardcorechick28

16 years 4 months ago

DeMona is

my alter ego on here...a character I created and continue to write about. DeMona guest stars in my father in law's poetry as well (Geezer), as his Killer also appears in mine.....glad you liked it.

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Parricide being dealt out

Parricide being dealt out here, I think thats the right word lol not sure on that one dont take it for gospel lol but another fine demona write your fleshing her out and making her tangiable ... good work I have loved watching the Demona and Killer poems evolute .... love and mountains of hugs Jayne-Chloe

hardcorechick28

16 years 4 months ago

I too

am enjoying watching Killer and DeMona develop into actual people. People you can really feel for on all different levels. Thats the great thing about using characters. You can evolve them into whatever you want them to be and it is sometimes fun to step out of your own skin and walk in their shoes for a while. Stay tuned for more.....

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

just goggled it yup I was

just goggled it yup I was sorta right ... patricide and matricide is killing your parents and parricide (the killing of any close relative), care of wiki lol love and hugs Jayne x x

hardcorechick28

16 years 4 months ago

thank you

I am glad you liked it. Like I mentioned to Gee, I have thought about DeMona's past since I created her. Everyone has a beginning and speaking from personal experience, adults are shaped by what happens to them during the course of their life. I wasn't always so dark and angry....it happened over the years and a series of really bad events. My other works seem to represent DeMona just as a vampire, killing creature etc. The flip side of her, is she has a human side. She has a heart and feelings. Even if she was full vampire, even the darkest of creatures still feel. The killing of the parents was a little Jim Morrisonesque, if you are at all familiar with the song "The End" (predasessor to Riders on the Storm). The man in the song loses his love and goes on a serial killing spree, which includes offing his family. Again, glad you enjoyed!!!

Geezer

16 years 4 months ago

Can't believe we...

Both came up with the same theme. Must be something in the water! LOL Awesome story! I have noticed that sometimes a theme seems to run through the site. I wonder if it is true of this one? I know this poem sounds like you put a a lot of thought into it, and I'm not trying to take anything away from your efforts, but if it works for you like it does for me, it just kinda flowed out. I had to put some effort into the begining, but once I got started, it just slid out from beneath my fingers. I really can empathsize with the subject. I wanted to show where Killer is coming from. You certainly did that with DeMona! Anyone can see what made her what she is. Your word choices were excellent and the description of fanged justice, is superb! Loved it! ~ Gee

hardcorechick28

16 years 4 months ago

once i

got it going it seemed to flow easily. i have thought alot about DeMona's past since I created her. There had to be a reason for her to be as vicious and vengeful as she is. It just took me a while to decide where to place her background. Now we know she is a hybrid (mortal/immortal) which explains her attraction to Deacon (vampire) and Killer who is a mortal man. She and Killer both have secrets to be further explored. I chose my wording carefully, especially when I didnt do a rough draft first because I know how sloppy first tries can be for me. Glad you enjoyed it. Now that I have time to work on stuff, hopefully my poetry will improve. talk to you soon....Carrie