To One So Far Away

I awake in the sparkly morning that still held the night's chill
the sunshine peers through open drapes
I am drawn to the heat and stare out onto the horizon.
A bluebird sings a melody upon a branch of stout and oak
drawing me in I am soothed by its lullaby.
The day wanes on, The rain has come.

Out my back porch I sit the sun has gone.
on this night I am drawn to the rain
enchanting me as it patters against my windowpane.
And I start to ponder memories past Its images are cast.
For all the "I love yous" once whispered under your breath
to all those empty promises that are lost but never met.

We once dreamed of an island
where we can get lost under the sun,
but things went wrong and you felt our hearts did not belong.
So away you went into the crippled dire's.
I am awake but lost in dreams A tear rolls down my cheek
Through godspeed I caress the moon
I am not yours to obey with loving remembrance to one so far away.

— ZARRANO, Jan 13, 2010

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Country/Region: USA

Critiques

magics02

16 years 3 months ago

Paulie my friend

I sat there right beside you facing the moon like Cher in Moonstruck La Luna she shouted(love that movie) and I felt your pain and dried your tears. When love runs out and trys to come back many years later, you find that it is not the same but know in your heart that you did share the biggest gift you had and that was LOVE. How appropratie for this time of year. I just love this one and your writings. It could use a little tweak here and there as there are caps in the middle of the poem sentences and some misspelled words if you don't mind me pointing them out as I also point to the moon and say Happy Valentine's Day to Paulie in New York. Magics02 "Determination Brings Success"

ZARRANO

16 years 3 months ago

ty

Sorry to say there are no unwanted caps in my poem it was spell checked several times and the poem was published as the poet i can put caps where i want but i do not see any unwanted use of capital letters if you can find them then so be i dont mind being critisized or critiqued with any of my work but my style is my style and that comes from within and its pauly not paulie lol thanks again for your kind words P

ZARRANO

16 years 3 months ago

ty

Sorry to say there are no unwanted caps in my poem it was spell checked several times and the poem was published.but I do not see any unwanted use of capital letters if you can find them or a mis spelled word then please send me a message and tell me all the mistakes you have found. I don't mind being critiqued with any of my work but my style is my style and that comes from within and its pauly not paulie lol thanks again for your kind words P

magics02

16 years 3 months ago

No way criticized here

Thanks Pauly for your response, let me make this clearer, your poem says you wanted raw truth that is the only way I commented on the caps. Yes you can put them wherever you choose, I looked it back over and noticed there were two sentences in one line without a period so that is why I commented on that for you. Just trying to help you out here nothing else, you have a choice to change it or leave it just as it is. :) Line 5 is that two sentences? Line 10 it reads memories past Its (it's) or is that two sentences? Line 19 is that two sentences, therefore if so then a period is needed. These are just minor things and may not be the case for you. I say the poem is beautiful and I am not picking it apart just noticed those little things that seem to catch my eyes. You do not need to change a thing but you asked for raw truth and that is all I gave. And yes by all means your style is your style and it is very well recieved, compliments to your style I say. Lovely. Magics02 "Determination Brings Success"