Seren

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she walked a tightrope till acid

— Seren, Jan 13, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 4 months ago

Hmmmm think I'll come back...

Hmmm I'll think I'll come back when there is a little more than one line... lol! Sounds interesting though.... make it a tightrope across an acid pit, you know the hollywood way! :) Dale :)

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

The first line is mine and then the next is from the mind of another so where the poem goes ... I have no control lol ... isnt it exciting ?? lol ... but i love do co writes it opens your mind and steps you out of your comfort zone and in doing opens the scope right up in other writes ... I will be updating as new lines are sent to me ... love and mountains of hugs Jayne x x x

Orphani

16 years 4 months ago

It’s amazing how much

It's amazing how much thoughtand feeling you can squeeze into one line. Here is an emotional balancing act being shattered by a dessolving carrosive force. Somtimes you see more in a less vivid write becase you have to use your imagination to fill in the the shadows.Simple and effective.love B

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Barry

I look forward to your finished poem with Brian have read the first line and am patiently waiting its finale ... I have left my beginning line open for the next person to go wherever they want to go ... I will be interested to see how it turns out myself lol with such great minds I try not to prempt where they may go ... but its always exciting to see their answering lines ... love and mountains of hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

lyz

16 years 4 months ago

Aarrgh

You got me, lol. I too will be back when the finished poem calls. My love. Lyz. XX no more stars until then.

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

LOL sorry huni … I am

LOL sorry huni ... I am waiting on the next line to update it lol all my love and biggest hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x tell Jade I got something for her ;)

lyz

16 years 4 months ago

Lol.

HURRY UP. LOL. Lyz. XX

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

LMAO I am waiting on extra

LMAO I am waiting on extra lines woman slow your rolllllll lmao hahah love ya god my house is starting to look like a refugee camp for wayward youths half of towns here already ... love and biggest hugs Jayne x x x

lyz

16 years 4 months ago

PARTY AT JAYNES HOUSE !!!!!!!

Yay, I will be there soon, maybe after this poem is writ. Lol Have a good one. Love from me. XX

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

I was meant to be having a

I was meant to be having a night with the girls tonight but plans changed ... we were having a couple of people round for drinks at first ... but then Jacob invited half of Taree ... so I am ringing the cops and warning them it might be a little noisy tonight .... theres about 20 here already and most of the people coming arent here yet ... I am starting to wonder if i should be scared or not ..... LMFAO and you know custers last stand this is Jaynies Last stand (at the bar) for a while ;) I know I shouldnt but eh lifes to be lived ... so fuck it ;) love and hugs Jayne x x x

Kob

16 years 4 months ago

Erm, I couldn't stop at one line.

She walked a tightrope till acid Broke all the strands of the rope Surprised her body was flaccid She realised, she couldn’t cope Falling into voids without help Nice one Jayne. I got carried away and would have written more, but you only asked for one line. I'm not sure if the tightrope is real, or is it the tightrope of lifes relationships and so forth. NOW ALL WE NEED IF FOR SOMEONE ELSE TO ADD TO IT! Shouldn'd be to hard... Kob.

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Kob,this is a

Dear Kob, this is a prearranged write with three other people but anytime you would like to co-author send me a private message and I would love to write with you ... I have learnt more writing with others than doing it on my own ... and its always good to see where another mind will go with the next line i look forward to hearing from you ;) kind regards love Jayne

Mark

16 years 4 months ago

this looks

this looks like it will be an interest. Looking forward to more :) Mark "some things change, some things do not"

Seren

16 years 4 months ago

Dear Mark

I am waiting on the next line from Brian and i am looking forward to see where it goes as well .. I find it exciting not knowing where the next lines will take us kind regards Jayne

Kob

16 years 4 months ago

Your one line poem

Hi Jayne, no problem, didn't realise, didn't mean to stand on your toes. Loved the first line. Will let you proceed without sticking my nose in. No offence meant, none taken! Great idea. Sincerely, Ian G. Kob.