A Patient Time

...about this poem is "sensible". The hibernating, to wait, to plan...etc..and I think maybe, your choice of words might just be so, too. Try reading your poem, aloud. You'll see that there are a few places that causes the mouth to "stumble", if you will. For instance, "The fruit of forbearance is soon tasted"...could be read easier with, " The fruit from hope's tree is soon tasted". When it can be read aloud effortlessly.....then, it is polished. Anyhoo...it was just a thought. All in all, it was a good effort, and I appreciated reading it. Thanks, for the read. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.

Must have been late and tired as now I read it it has a lovely rhythm and sense, and unusual style all its own, I enjoyed it a lot after reading several times. Love to you Franny from Ann

Hi Franny enjoyed this a lot, it had the flavour of a well chosen recipe oddly enough, something solid & certain in a strange familiar way, not a trace of dithering or uncertainty, it was a pleasure in that regard & made the story feel like a happy ending was inevitable, I don't know why, but I admire the way you created this perception. Cheers Anni~ "To thine own self be true, and it must follow, as the night the day, thou canst not then be false to any man." ~William Shakespeare, Hamlet.

I enjoyed this poem very much. Leaves me with nice images. xena465