Conflicting Emotions

take hope by the throat and make it yours ... like you did this poem ;) your halfway there ... somehow this feels like not another story but its all about you ... if I am wrong I apologise I often read too much into things Love and biggest hugs Jayne x x x

...the "flow" is effortless. In the 8th stanza...second line, "I am far to weak", the "to" should be a, "too". Other than that, a really nice effort! I have a new entry, myself. It's called, "Dawn's Surprise". I'd like for you to critique it, if you could. I really felt your heart in this one. "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.

Oh Green Eyes... do you not see what we all see? The seduction of your emerald green irises? You could have any male you like if you haplessly twitch those sleek pointed ears of yours.... so... Take him by the scuff of the neck, head butt him and knee him in the nadgers, he'll go down like anyone else! Nnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnoooooooooooo don't do it Green eyes.... you can do better than that scoundrel! Don't let the devil get the better of you... This is an extremely fludic piece that has a lot heart in it and makes you cling and feel sorry for the observer, like Jayne I hope that this is not your reality Green eyes and that you are not subjected to this, if you are break away now! This is very good write indeed so full of genuine and convincing emotional strife and turbulence, a classic of your wordsmithing! Dale :)

As i said, you sound like a very brave and strong women. But one with a lot of love, great poem as well, Love Roscoe..

A tormented write and read, sad but true of some. A strong person wrote this and so many could advise, but will she hear. I think maybe her mind knows the right thing to. Love and wishes to you, Love from Lyz. XX

Liz didn't know that you could express yourself so beautifully and you should write more because your words are so amazing!