Shades in the Grey (edit)

I dont know what else to say except you get better and better love hubby xoxoxoxox

Once again a piece of complex waiting, I would rather you dance on the edge of a mountain stream drying the pebbles with your warmed speed, in haste to make a change or so not to hasten the coming dawn. Come the laughter of you as you try to hold the sun just on the horizon to cease the day in its full glory. Little one embrace the dawn each day and fill the sky as the sun with everything you are, you will lift your burdens as the sun reaches for the noon, Yours Ian.T

and still, quiet yet on the edge of uncomfortable - trapped. any reader can find themselves immersed in these moments and relate. on a technical note: S5 L7 "I was" this is the only place you break present tense and it ripples through the entire work causing, at least, me to double take and reread. I think It would work much more fluently as "I am" A pleasant moment ken

ou magic sundial:- This makes me think of the Haïku:- "Bamboo shadows sweep the steps but no dust stirs.".............I know not who wrote this. There is a Fire lady" in the Australian Aboriginal ways keeping the fire embers alight. You are our sundial lady telling tales of the passing of time. And when you stop to see, to feel, to sense its passing you capture our attention as the shadow of your sundial crosses our minds and relates your piece of magic poetry for the day. We love it and you cannot deny it is beautiful dear Jayne. Love from Ann as ever. "inhaling ethered threads".....could you mean ethereal that is good.

sincere stuff, and like Ann the last two lines were my favorite, though I think you did mean "ethereal" or "ether" probably "ether", that fits perfectly. Here you also create your own kind of poetic verbiage: "watching flies circling to their doom/flypaper is buzzing/with a will to live.." How many of us have watched that and not written it down with such abandon? Good job! GB

The progression as if a short story of a single day and the infinite that is with held in every moment is well displayed. Kudos my dear.

Of Course you are great Seren>.miss chatting with you been busy as heck and thinking of you and loving your poem here very much, love magics02 xoxoxox

for giving you the energy to write this inspiring poem of hope. In strength and beauty you have once again graced us with a wonderful poem. I read this slowly, softly and aloud. Wonderful. Love Lyz. Thanks. XX

To take a simple subject and lift it into a greatness of light. I really like the last two lines. Seabhac I find it hard to keep up with your rate of writing with my rate of reading time...

There are some extraordinarily lovely lines here Jayne, it is a work I think I will need to revisit to really appreciate the entirety (it's late & I am so weary). I loved the imagery of the movement of time tracked by the shadow of sun & moon & the silence after the storm which is so profound. Take good care Jayne. I do hope this year holds healing & all good things for you. Cheers xx Anni~ "To thine own self be true, and it must follow, as the night the day, thou canst not then be false to any man." ~William Shakespeare, Hamlet.

Dear Lady Jayne Cool fingers of twilight I wish for these my friend Maybe someday Always Electric Blue