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Avacado Smiles

Avacado Smiles



I found spirit in time,
hands that moved about a clock face,

and fortitude that spread
the grin I needed to share.

It wasn't like saving pennies;
easy toss into a plastic jar -

it was harder than that,

like painting a perfect nose
on an alligator pear
waiting for it to smile.

The treasure was knowing
that care moved within my veins,
and vibrated your essence.

Happiness found its place.

I could only offer my hand;
soft words
and genuine concern

but you found them enough
to embrace your valor
and step forward.

— Pamela A. Lamppa, Jan 11, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New England - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Robert Frost, Robert Louis Stevenson, William Butler Yeats, John Keats, Pablo Neruda, Algernon Charles Swinburne, T.S. Elliott, and too many more to begin to cover them all.

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lyz

16 years 4 months ago

What a lovely poem

Very well written and a very nice read. Love the title. Who'd have thought that of an avocado. I love the sentiment in this poem, and the care that I read, is truly in your veins. Lovely Pam. Lyz. XX
Pamela A. Lamppa

Pamela A. Lamppa

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you Lyz

I am pleased you enjoyed this bit of free verse and glad for your appreciation of its contest. Yes, an avocado ... I have NO idea where that came from, it just did. Thank you for your kind words and continued support. Most appreciated. ~Pamela
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 4 months ago

Sounds like...

your hubby is well loved. Also sounds like he encourages your whims and pastimes. You really think he is such a brave man for loving you? A man needs a little levity in his life. I mean, look at all the serious things we need to keep track of: Football and baseball stats, what brand of fertilizer to feed our lawns, etc. I like the way you got your ideas across with a minimal amount of words. Very nice job. ~ Geezer
Pamela A. Lamppa

Pamela A. Lamppa

16 years 4 months ago

Thank you Geezer

I am pleased for your comment on this rather odd little piece of free verse. *smile* It was actually written for someone who needed to pull all of her "self" together and muster the courage to take that one step forward. But, I like the interpretation you provide. It is the prerogative of the reader to take what he might from it. My "significant other" is probably smiling about now when he considers the "levity" a man needs... I am smiling too. Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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Quillsvein1

16 years 4 months ago

A sincere and

very well worded piece. You obviously have a working command of the craft of free verse--and it is a craft, no matter how one may title it--and illustrates clearly to the reader your willingness to have transcended self centered fear and make a commitment to another. A very notable poem. GB
Pamela A. Lamppa

Pamela A. Lamppa

16 years 4 months ago

GB

I thank you for your wonderful comment on Avocado Smiles. I am pleased you found this free verse to your liking and indeed, regardless of the term :free: there is still a great deal of structure to writing free verse. I consider myself a rhyme and form poet and am practicing at expanding my horizons with free verse and poetic prose. Your words here mean a great deal and any suggestions for improvement will be warmly welcomed. Thank you again. ~Pamela