Bruised Mind part 2 crossing the line

Thanks for commenting Barry, this is what Brian was telling me to, with the hunger poem. china doll was the first poem i wrote when i started going through that ''stuff'' I was into rap and shakespere at the time and i think that these poems represent that, also the inexperience i lacked as a 'writer' then and not just a purger. I found it hard then (06) when i wrote them first two to be spicific about events or feelings, I have one more that i wrote after he left that i'll post later, the fourthpart that i posted first after suggestions from brian, mind bruised by thoughtful fists, did so well and i just wanted to post all the main ones i had done thought the last few years to show how the writing had progressed in such a short space of time with the help of all your suggestions ; ) Bruised mind got such alot of good feedback, but i still thought it was not great, i think this is because it was new to me being opening blunt and honest about events rather than doing what i did here, with the flowering. Heres to getting rid of bell flowers and whistles lol vicki ; )

Hey Nina, I think that was the intent, the agressor thought he was in control in this peice, but the victem had ''gone into her head'' and couldn't be touched. That was the intent back then in 06 when i wrote it. This was the second piece i had ever written about what was happening, and i can see it was more like covered up purging. Thanks as always for your feedback, its always most welcome ; ) vicki ; )